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by Lap
Tue Dec 12, 2023 3:35 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "A Matter of Memory" 05/01/24
Replies: 376
Views: 214125

Re: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "Tender & Wild" (SS23) 12/12/23

Goddamn, the Random Number Generator Gods have smiled upon me this year! I was grinning like a fool reading this, it was lovely, and more than I ever could have wished for. Thanks for making a somewhat banal prompt into such a lovely little story! :D

by Lap
Tue Nov 14, 2023 11:58 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Trapped all the Same - An unfulfilled SS20 Prompt for Lap
Replies: 12
Views: 7754

Re: Trapped all the Same - An unfulfilled SS20 Prompt for Lap

"A wretched soul, bruised with adversity." A particularly ironic epigraph, given how easily hemophiliacs (Haru) bruise. Shakespeare, btw. :-) (Okay, yes, I had to look it up. I'm not Ritsu...) (As I warned you, I'm lousy at analysis & deep thinking about stories, so all I really have ...
by Lap
Sun Nov 12, 2023 4:31 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Consequences of Comfort
Replies: 11
Views: 13434

Consequences of Comfort

Epilogue --- Shiina looked through the shoe rack in the entryway of the apartment a second time, trying to find her shoes. “Miwako? Have you seen my black flats?” she called down the hall. When there was no answer, she shook her head at her mistake. Right, she’s doing overtime this week, with that ...
by Lap
Sun Nov 12, 2023 4:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Consequences of Comfort
Replies: 11
Views: 13434

Consequences of Comfort

For the next several days, at around seven in the evening, Shiina received a text message from Shizune. Deleting the messages unread became easier with repetition, but she was surprised when they stopped coming after only five days. That’s a relief , she thought to herself. Trying to convince hersel...
by Lap
Sun Nov 12, 2023 4:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Consequences of Comfort
Replies: 11
Views: 13434

Consequences of Comfort

Kasumi Miyata turned out to look like what Shiina had assumed her grandmother would look like—short and plump and full of smiles. “You can call me Grandmother Kasumi,” she said as they introduced themselves. “And you might as well call me Grandmother Aina, so we know which grandmother you’re talking...
by Lap
Sun Nov 12, 2023 4:29 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Consequences of Comfort
Replies: 11
Views: 13434

Consequences of Comfort

Thanks, as always, to Feurox, for reading and suggestions and making me think about what I'm writing. What you're about to read is a much better story thanks to him. Thanks to Naryzhud (NoticeMeOppai) for additional proofreading and feedback. Thanks to Zee McZed for still more proofreading, and for ...
by Lap
Thu Nov 02, 2023 1:41 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Flutter Bonus Levels (One-Shots) - Directional Influence [22/1/24]
Replies: 33
Views: 32298

Re: Flutter Bonus Levels (One-Shots) - Player Two [02/11/23]

First off, there isn’t a doctor (or friend) in the world who would lead off with “She died,” unless they’re a sadist who hates the person they’re talking to. That’s something that comes up in conversation later on, while filling in the details. That kind of opening just comes off like a cheap shot t...
by Lap
Wed Sep 27, 2023 11:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Trapped all the Same - An unfulfilled SS20 Prompt for Lap
Replies: 12
Views: 7754

Re: Trapped all the Same - An unfulfilled SS20 Prompt for Lap

God. Damn. Wow. Just… Wow. No tears (sorry!), but definitely an aching heart. I’ve always been in awe of your writing, but I truly think this is one of the best, if not the best, stories you’ve written. I am humbled and amazed to think that I might have had even a little bit to do with the creation ...
by Lap
Thu Apr 27, 2023 9:50 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Scarred Muse
Replies: 21
Views: 40065

Re: Scarred Muse

Thanks for your comments! Sorry I’ve not responded sooner; a broken wrist has slowed my writing considerably… I’m afraid I am a fan of one-liner chapter closers, so they’r here to stay :P As to the scent thing, yeah, I noticed that too myself on rereading. Shoulda dialed that back a bit. So very gla...
by Lap
Wed Apr 12, 2023 1:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Scarred Muse
Replies: 21
Views: 40065

Re: Scarred Muse

Well, those kinds of negatives I can live with. :D I've got a couple of other stories about Hanako & Rin in my WIP pile, hopefully will finish them Someday™.

Thank you for your kind & thoughtful words!
by Lap
Mon Mar 27, 2023 10:13 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Avenues of Communication (Complete)
Replies: 72
Views: 49140

Re: Avenues of Communication (Complete)

Thanks for the read, and taking the time for such in-depth feedback. It's readers like you that really keep me motivated! I confess I probably see more flaws with this story than my readers do—it was definitely a journeyman work (along with Home ), and there is much I would also change about it wer...
by Lap
Fri Mar 10, 2023 8:21 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 2015-4-1}
Replies: 864
Views: 415414

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 2015-4-1}

FWIW, this is still available on AO3, though you do need an account to read it.

https://archiveofourown.org/works/20635 ... rs/4485663
by Lap
Tue Jan 24, 2023 5:32 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Years That the Locusts Have Eaten (complete)
Replies: 45
Views: 43496

Re: The Years That the Locusts Have Eaten (completed)

That...was like being off my meds. You capture the Depression mood/mindset very well. I'm glad I read it, but I'm not sure I'll ever re-read it, it hits too close to home. The epilogue kinda came out of left field; not sure it's really necessary for this piece. Feels like it belongs to some other wo...
by Lap
Tue Jan 03, 2023 8:29 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Secret Santa 2022 - Story collection
Replies: 12
Views: 17125

Re: Secret Santa 2022 - Story collection

This one's for XPND.Dev — Hope it amuses!
Dashing Through the Snow...
by Lap
Tue Jan 03, 2023 8:27 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Lap's One shots & misc - New Jan 3 2023 - "Dashing Through the Snow..."
Replies: 44
Views: 38971

SXIII: "Dashing Through the Snow..."

SXIII: Dashing Through the Snow... For XPND.Dev Rika first realized that she'd left her dorm room door unlocked when Saki burst into her room and woke her at what felt like the crack of dawn on Sunday morning. "Rika! Wake up!" "Whuh?" Rika mumbled blearily, then screamed, "...