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by Raimen
Wed Apr 08, 2020 9:55 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Raimen's Repository
Replies: 7
Views: 690

Re: Raimen's Repository

First of all, your comments aren't "overly critical" -- pointing out things that feel off to you (and therefore maybe to other readers as well) is a Good Thing(tm). I want the Lilly that I write to feel like the Lilly in the VN. Knowing what I need to improve on is the first step to actually improvi...
by Raimen
Wed Apr 01, 2020 12:17 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4167

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)

First, let me apologize for taking too long to reply to your feedback. I think I've started writing a reply two or three times, but I think of something else and I get sidetracked and it never happens. But today I'm going to do it. This time for real! Hisao forgave them much too quickly. I say this ...
by Raimen
Mon Mar 16, 2020 8:59 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Raimen's Repository
Replies: 7
Views: 690

Re: Raimen's Repository

The following post was written in response to Stiles Long's writing contest. Each participant was given a list of KS character pairings and a list of locations. One of each was chosen for this fic. There were a limited set of options available to participants in the contest and it may be that this f...
by Raimen
Mon Mar 16, 2020 8:58 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Raimen's Repository
Replies: 7
Views: 690

Raimen's Repository

It feels kind of silly creating a table of contents post for one short story. But that's hopefully just temporary. As inspiration (or writing contests) strike, I'll add more.

Table of Contents
by Raimen
Mon Mar 09, 2020 9:05 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4167

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Epilogue: Learning Old Skills (Fri, July 27) Friday’s classes were coming to an end. From her seat at the back of class 3-3, Hanako could see almost everyone. To her, it seemed that even though there were still classes on Saturday, people just seemed to be more excited to leave on Friday than most ...
by Raimen
Mon Mar 09, 2020 9:04 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4167

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 16: The First Rank (Thur, July 26) Misha sat at her desk fidgeting with her pencil. Thursday’s classes were winding down. She looked around the room. Hisao sat to her left, and he looked like he was counting the seconds until class ended. Shizune had already put most of her books away and w...
by Raimen
Mon Mar 02, 2020 10:28 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4167

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 15: Out of Reach (Wed, July 25) The sun was shining on Yamaku’s soccer field. Hisao sat in the shade of a rather large tree, finishing the last few bites of his lunch. On the field, some students were playing a pick-up game of soccer. “You’re just finishing your lunch now? Man you eat slow....
by Raimen
Mon Mar 02, 2020 10:24 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4167

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 14: Iced Tea (Tue, July 24) “Bishop c-captures on f3.” Lilly’s hands went to the kingside. Sure enough, there was a bishop where her knight used to be. Even though she didn’t need to, she felt the bump on the top of the piece that indicated that it is one of Hanako’s. She sighed; she wasn’t...
by Raimen
Mon Feb 24, 2020 10:46 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4167

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 13: Struggles (Tue, July 24) “C’mon Hisao! One more lap! Don’t give up on me now!” Hisao was barely jogging as he finished his first lap. Emi kept pace with him, but her patience with this speed was reaching its limit. He was moving so slowly that she could probably run circles around him. ...
by Raimen
Mon Feb 24, 2020 10:44 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4167

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 12: Invitations and Obligations (Mon, July 23) The door to the tea room opened slowly. Lilly’s voice called out, “Hanako, is that you?” “Y-yes. I-I’ve got Hisao with me.” “That’s wonderful,” came Lilly’s reply. “I had hoped we would meet today. Please come in and make yourselves comfortable...
by Raimen
Tue Feb 18, 2020 4:25 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Feurox's Den of Sadness [04/26/2020]
Replies: 93
Views: 9681

Re: Feurox's Den of Sadness [02/18/2020]

On the whole, I enjoyed I am Disappeared . It was interesting, and just long enough for me to read during my lunch break. So thank you for sharing it with us. I feel that I'm not very good at offering constructive criticism. But one needs practice to improve, so I will try. Here goes ... Who's the f...
by Raimen
Mon Feb 17, 2020 10:32 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4167

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 11: Two New Beginnings (Mon, July 23) The door to the nurse’s office opened, and Hisao stepped outside. Behind him, Emi could see the nurse holding the door open. The nurse called out, “He’s alive! He’s alive!” Hisao turned back to look at the nurse as Emi replied, “I should hope so!” “You ...
by Raimen
Mon Feb 17, 2020 10:28 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4167

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Interlude 8: A Pound of Prevention (Sun, July 22) “And … that should be everything, “ the nurse said to his patient after his examination. “I don’t see any signs of scraping or infection. We’ll just need to get your legs back on and you’ll be good to go.” “You know, “ replied Emi, swinging her legs...
by Raimen
Mon Feb 10, 2020 3:18 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4167

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Bonus Content - Hisao and Hanako's Chess Game I don't know if anyone would be interested in this bonus content, but I thought to post it just in case. This is the PGN file for the game that Hisao and Hanako played in Chapter 10. [White “Hisao Nakai"] [Black “Hanako Ikezawa"] [Result "0-1"] [SetUp "...
by Raimen
Mon Feb 10, 2020 1:16 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation (complete)
Replies: 42
Views: 4167

Re: A Prank Gone Wrong - a Shower Scenes continuation

Chapter 10: Queen's Gambit Declined (Sat, July 21) After what felt like a long Saturday, Hanako arrived back in her room. She thought about her day so far. Her morning classes weren't terrible; they were just long. She had lunch with Lilly, and it was superficially pleasant. Hisao didn't join them,...