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Bottom of the Well Hiding until Mr. Katayama leaves the hospital takes a bit of effort. Especially with the company I’m keeping. “Hicchan, why are we sitting over here watching the hospital doors anyways?” Glancing over at my co-conspirators, I am grateful that at least Shizune has kept her binocul...

I wonder if Yamaku has such an odd ceremony. Most schools, so I understand, only hold this in April at the start of the school year. My old school did one at the beginning of every trimester. Nice bit of lampshading here... It's still strange, though. I could almost lip sync it at this point – he g...

Drink Me My parents took the idea of us staying for two extra days well. Rika rather was delighted by the idea. It seems almost like another way to rebel against her father. We could only stay for an hour, in order to catch the train back, but that was long enough. The fence, the woods behind it, th...

I think you're doing an excellent job of making her father an unlikable bastard. Is there a plan to have him evolve as a character, perhaps after he finds out about his daughter's true health? He's a little two-dimensional, acting as an overbearing father/husband who might do what he does due to lo...

*whistles innocently*

Ah, the joys of finishing ahead of schedule. Integration is the most stress filled time in any game's development. If it goes smoothly, over in a few days. If it doesn't.... well let's just say we began in September and only got it working right *checks watch* 14 hours ago. So, rewarded myself by fi...

Been sucked into work. The life of a video game developer when crunch time hits. *groan*

Somehow I missed this one while looking for Rika fanfics. Beyond typographical and grammatical errors, the story itself is well done so far and I hope to see more. There is one nitpick. She has Hypoplastic Left Heart Syndrome, which is not a "cardiac disease". She's missing half of her hea...

(The super popular bread is the veal cutlet bread in case you can't remember. They also mention chicken katsudon bread being very popular.) I admit, the game has me highly curious about these breads. "Katsudon" is just Japanese for cutlet. Neither of the two is really a uniquely Japanese ...

One minor complain I had. One chapter you had all the character talking about "the bread" like there was only one kind of bread that existed. It just seemed strange that nobody ever referred to it by what kind of bread it was, like it was left in as a place holder and you never went back ...

Clever! Well done.

...I asked him for something his mother might call a girl wearing too much makeup. What you were looking for is probably Gyaru . I don't recommend using it, though. You don't want to make your readers look up obscure slang terms. It really wrecks story immersion.. Yeah, I'll just stick to US terms....

This one I had fun with. I'd written it a dozen different ways, to hit the topics and points needed for the next pivot point in the plot. I purposefully decided not to do the stereotypical "run into Iwanako" scenario I've seen in far too many fanfics, and handled well in very few. (I still...

Where did you pull the kanji from, though? This might be irrelevant, but I remember "water trade" to be an idiom for the sex industry, so... "水商売" refers to so-called 'waterfront businesses'—smuggling, prostitution, street hawking, nightclubs etc. They're businesses that are hea...

Yeah, those kinds of things happen when you try to use idioms from a language you don't speak. I recommend against doing stuff like that. If you're not sure what the meaning is yourself, how are your readers supposed to guess? And speaking of which - in the four lines you added you use the word &qu...