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by Zerebos
Tue Aug 13, 2019 8:56 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Winter's Blossom (Updated 8/13/19)
Replies: 12
Views: 1332

Re: Winter's Blossom (Updated 1/17/19)

Winter’s Blossom - Part 3 “Wow”, is all I can think to say as we enter the massive building. “Well it is a mall after all,” Ikuno counters sarcastically, twirling her arms around her to accentuate the grandiose space before us. I give her an unamused glare. “Just ‘cause I don’t go to them doesn’t m...
by Zerebos
Tue Aug 13, 2019 11:21 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Gravity: A Molly Pseudo- Pseudo Route. Updated as of 11/03/2019
Replies: 113
Views: 28632

Re: Gravity: A Molly Pseudo- Pseudo Route. Updated as of 08/01/2019

I really enjoyed this reboot. It's definitely got a different feel from the first one, but a good different. Can definitely tell that into act 2 you really picked up on Molly's inner voice. Although that could just be Molly finding herself since she's dealing with so much at once :)
by Zerebos
Thu Jan 17, 2019 10:31 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Spectral Letters and Other Stories [08/28/2019]
Replies: 61
Views: 4552

Re: Ekephrasis/ American Spirit 01/08/2019

I think this turned out rather well considering the subject matter at hand. I really like how it was handled through imagery mainly. Not only did it not come out vulgar it feels like it strongly drives the point home and even gives you an insight to their mind. It had its purple parts for sure, but ...
by Zerebos
Thu Jan 17, 2019 7:41 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Winter's Blossom (Updated 8/13/19)
Replies: 12
Views: 1332

Re: Winter's Blossom (An S9 Submission)

Winter’s Blossom - Part 2 “Hisaoooo.” I wake up to being poked in the face. “Hisaoooo wake up, we’re pulling in to Tokyo Station.” I groggily sit up, pulling my head off of Ikuno’s shoulder. “Sleep well?” “Yeah I guess.” I nod weakly. “I’m not used to getting up that early.” “5am isn’t really that ...
by Zerebos
Thu Jan 17, 2019 7:38 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Winter's Blossom (Updated 8/13/19)
Replies: 12
Views: 1332

Re: Winter's Blossom (An S9 Submission)

Thanks everyone for reading this at all! Chris - Totally agree that is a tough situation, but it gets better for Hisao don't worry. Mirage - While I'm glad I'm not last I still feel bad. And yeah, Ikuno might be just a bit bossy :lol: Feurox - I did do a tad bit of background writing :wink: I'm glad...
by Zerebos
Fri Jan 04, 2019 4:10 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection
Replies: 52
Views: 7299

Re: Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection

Pablo, that is not at all the set of characters I expected with that prompt, but that's a good thing. I actually really liked the cast you chose and how you brought them together. Kenji stories like this are always hilarious and this is no exception. I think your characterization of him was pretty g...
by Zerebos
Thu Jan 03, 2019 7:24 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Winter's Blossom (Updated 8/13/19)
Replies: 12
Views: 1332

Re: Winter's Blossom (An S9 Submission)

Immediately I perk up and look at Ikuno. “I knew that’d get your attention.” She chuckles. “But I was kidding, sort of.” “Sort of?” “Well you can’t see me undress but—” “So, no,” I say teasingly. She gives me a dirty look for interrupting before continuing, “but, you can help me pick out a few shirt...
by Zerebos
Thu Jan 03, 2019 7:24 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Winter's Blossom (Updated 8/13/19)
Replies: 12
Views: 1332

Winter's Blossom (Updated 8/13/19)

Your Prompt is: Hisao goes home for the winter holidays with a girl who was not featured in a canon route. (A mistletoe kiss would be enjoyed but not necessary.) Victim: PKMNthiefChris ----- I want to apologize for this being so late, I have had a lot of bad things happen this past month and it’s h...
by Zerebos
Fri Jul 13, 2018 11:39 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Spectral Letters and Other Stories [08/28/2019]
Replies: 61
Views: 4552

Re: Ekephrasis: A Rika and Hisao Story

Just wonderful Feurox, seriously I thought this was lovely. I can agree with some of the previous sentiments of the sudden pairing of Suzu near the end. But it almost makes sense when you consider the characterizations of them you depicted here. They would be the exact people to impulsively get clos...
by Zerebos
Sat Jun 16, 2018 2:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Dark Winter Sky (S8)
Replies: 7
Views: 1525

Re: Dark Winter Sky (S8)

Wow this was really well done, the characters felt spot-on and wonderfully vivid. It was also extremely cute, but I think the spotlight was stolen from Nurse in this one which was unexpected given the prompt :D
by Zerebos
Sat Jun 16, 2018 1:38 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: "The New Year" S8 Submission: For - WillDFly
Replies: 8
Views: 1430

Re: "The New Year" S8 Submission: For - WillDFly

This an absolutely wonderful read. Definitely the type of experience I have come to expect from you :wink:
by Zerebos
Fri Jun 15, 2018 12:08 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Fresh Snow - S8 Submission
Replies: 7
Views: 1192

Re: Fresh Snow - S8 Submission

Totally not late in responding to this :oops: First of all thank you for doing such a good job on my vague prompt, you did a great capturing what I was after. This was a really great read and I think the overall metaphor that you accentuated at the end really embodies the feelings during the holiday...
by Zerebos
Sun Mar 11, 2018 11:49 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Ungraceful Reunion - An Emilogue (Chap 4 - Updated 2/20/19)
Replies: 18
Views: 3994

Re: Ungraceful Reunion - An Emilogue (Chap 3 - Updated 3/11/18)

Well it took me all day to read this—not due to the writing itself, but because I got busy. But MAN it was worth all the time I took. You got some great writing going on here Scratchman. The story itself is so unique and captivating, and your characters feel so alive I love it. Tsu is absolutely ado...
by Zerebos
Thu Mar 08, 2018 4:38 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Within a Looking Glass – A Rika pseudo-route
Replies: 112
Views: 13145

Re: Within a Looking Glass – A Rika pseudo-route

I was actually in the middle of replying when I noticed you updated. The story so far is cute, but to me it feels like things are being rushed along especially with that most recent post. Perhaps that's intentional especially due to how your Rika is but the whole timeline feels very quick. Your SPaG...
by Zerebos
Fri Mar 02, 2018 10:21 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Updated 10/13)
Replies: 1031
Views: 275555

Re: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Updated 1/6)

“Gods,” Saki says, a laugh bleeding into her shaking voice. “I can’t believe we did that.” Is Saki meant to be calling out to all the gods? :lol: Another good chapter, the shooting gallery scene was pretty cute and makes sense for Shizune's attitude. Poor Mitsuru though, if he knew what that yukata...