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by Jake Zero
Sun Jun 04, 2017 1:08 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Infinite Promises - A Lilly Epilogue [updated 6/8]
Replies: 51
Views: 11564

Re: Infinite Promises - A Lilly Epilogue [updated 6/2]

The way you mentioned Shizune was out of character for her. Prior to Lilly leaving for Scotland, she did all the work for her class and acted as though she were a proper member of the Student Council. Seeing Lilly work hard again, Shizune, in an act of kindness, gave Lilly some documents she needed....
by Jake Zero
Wed Mar 29, 2017 3:18 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Name Withheld For Spoilers
Replies: 19
Views: 3738

Re: Name Withheld For Spoilers

Agreed. Mutou makes a lot more sense.
by Jake Zero
Tue Feb 21, 2017 12:20 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Love and Hisao's Regret (Chapter 5 Added 2-28-2016)
Replies: 33
Views: 9477

Re: Hanako's Love and Hisao's Regret (Chapter 5 Added 2-28-2

Zerebos wrote:This is very unique continuation of Hanako's good end, not something I've seen before. I really like it, it definitely seems like a real possibility in canon too!
Someone has apparently not read Sisterhood.
by Jake Zero
Sat Feb 11, 2017 12:39 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Infinite Promises - A Lilly Epilogue [updated 6/8]
Replies: 51
Views: 11564

Re: Infinite Promises - A Lilly Route Epilogue [updated 2/11

I'll keep that in mind for the future.
by Jake Zero
Tue Feb 07, 2017 8:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Infinite Promises - A Lilly Epilogue [updated 6/8]
Replies: 51
Views: 11564

Re: Infinite Promises - A Lilly Route Epilogue [updated 2/7]

As always, thanks a lot for helping me improve my writing, Mirage! Really appreciate it! My new goal is to release the next chapter with no errors for you to find. That would be one hell of an achievement :P . See you next time! Good luck with that. Mirage is the king of all Grammar Nazis. :twisted:
by Jake Zero
Tue Jan 24, 2017 7:10 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Infinite Promises - A Lilly Epilogue [updated 6/8]
Replies: 51
Views: 11564

Re: Infinite Promises - A Lilly Route Epilogue [updated 1/24

Mirage_GSM wrote:It's a wonder Lilly slept through that :lol:
Or has she...
DUN! DUN!! DUN!!!

Joking aside, he has a point, since Lilly's sense of hearing is sharper than most of the main characters.
by Jake Zero
Sat Jan 21, 2017 3:10 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Infinite Promises - A Lilly Epilogue [updated 6/8]
Replies: 51
Views: 11564

Re: Infinite Promises - A Lilly Route Epilogue [updated 1/20

only a select few students have disabilities that do not interfere with heavy-duty activities. Just looking at Hisao's class I think the student not cleared for wightlifting would be Ritsu, Akio, Misaki, maybe Naomi - and most of all Hisao... Don't forget Suzu! I dont think a narcoleptic should he ...
by Jake Zero
Sun Oct 30, 2016 11:50 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Katawa Aniki (KS Rewrite) (18+ Occasionally) [Updated 10/30]
Replies: 241
Views: 44155

Re: Katawa Aniki (KS Rewrite) (18+ Occasionally) [Updated 10

This part is very sweet. When I was reading the scene when Shizune was comforting Kano (not THAT kind of comforting) I had the song "Everything's Alright" from To the Moon in my head.
by Jake Zero
Sun Oct 30, 2016 5:07 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191111 Two Old & Colourful Pieces)
Replies: 1806
Views: 250494

Re: Yamaku Book Club (All Hallow's Eve Edition)

If it's in first person, then it'd be "I" instead of "you." Also, those examples? Those raise an eyebrow more than they make you laugh.
by Jake Zero
Wed Sep 14, 2016 8:15 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 04/30/16 ~ recommitted to completion.
Replies: 850
Views: 206553

Re: Tomorrow's Doom - Aiko Kurai (OC)

Nice start. Only a few typos, but you misspelled Mutou twice. A few other things: Hisao wouldn't wear sweaterwests to classes. Yamaku has uniforms for that. So Emi wouldn't have seen him in one at that point either. Heterochromia is okay, but does she really need another disability in addition to h...
by Jake Zero
Thu Sep 01, 2016 7:14 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191111 Two Old & Colourful Pieces)
Replies: 1806
Views: 250494

Re: Yamaku Book Club (Hanako/Hisao: Road to Tokyo!)

How about the collab fanfiction, Katawa Aniki, which centers around 2 new characters and how they come across Hanako and Shizune, who are more fleshed out here than in the VN itself, by Popo Popo and Diet Kane?
by Jake Zero
Sun Aug 07, 2016 3:54 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Katawa Aniki (KS Rewrite) (18+ Occasionally) [Updated 10/30]
Replies: 241
Views: 44155

Re: Katawa Aniki (KS Rewrite) (18+ Occasionally) [Updated 7/

Miki: "You know what they say: a lady on the street, a freak in bed.”
That is scary, knowing Lilly in the VN.
by Jake Zero
Tue Aug 02, 2016 1:19 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 87035

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 18/06/2013)

Trivun wrote:
“Just...?” Before I can answer Hisao, a slightly large pink mass materialises behind him, with a smaller purple creature at the side.


Shizune has blue hair, not purple.
by Jake Zero
Mon Aug 01, 2016 1:50 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191111 Two Old & Colourful Pieces)
Replies: 1806
Views: 250494

Re: Yamaku Book Club (Hanako/Hisao: Road to Tokyo!)

After reading this story, I could imagine Hanako and Hisao signing the song "Uncontrollable" from Xenoblade Chronicles X as that is a rock song that even I think Hanako would love, even though the game didn't exist back when this fanfic was written.