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by freddy753
Fri May 20, 2016 6:23 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Tragic Tale of Iwanako
Replies: 45
Views: 9170

Re: The Tragic Tale of Iwanako

Is it time to start dredging up old concept characters that never made it into the game and start writing stories centered around them?
by freddy753
Wed May 11, 2016 9:23 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "Lost & Found" 16/5/16
Replies: 339
Views: 55652

Re: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "Morning Routine" 12/5/16

I think you did a great job of describing just how painful doing something as simple as getting out of bed can be for someone with arthritis. I'd really love to see a successful Naomi/Natsume route that doesn't just get abandoned after a while.
by freddy753
Wed May 11, 2016 4:37 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Updated 10/13)
Replies: 1029
Views: 274382

Re: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Updated 5/11)

This was a nice early birthday surprise :D
by freddy753
Thu Apr 21, 2016 9:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "Lost & Found" 16/5/16
Replies: 339
Views: 55652

Re: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "Snowblind Finale" 22/4/16

I think that wrapped things up nicely. It's always nice to see an update from you, considering how slow the forums have gotten lately.
by freddy753
Thu Mar 31, 2016 11:26 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 11/1/19)
Replies: 575
Views: 207080

Re: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 4-1-16)

I had to do a double take when I saw this at the top of the forum to make sure I wasn't seeing things. I tore through this chapter in like 15 minutes, so I think I need to go back and re-read the chapter and the ones before it so I can refresh my memory, but this is a nice return to form. Glad to se...
by freddy753
Thu Mar 24, 2016 2:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "Lost & Found" 16/5/16
Replies: 339
Views: 55652

Re: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "Snowblind Part II" 24/3/16

So far, I like this story. It's a shame you've killed Hisao off in the least dignified way possible in your earlier story. Also, it seems like in this, Hisao is a lot closer to Taro's gang than you portrayed him in Monomyth.
by freddy753
Thu Feb 25, 2016 10:49 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Benefit of Hindsight (updated 4/16!)
Replies: 175
Views: 34776

Re: The Benefit of Hindsight (updated 2/22!)

I understand where you're coming from now, but I think this chapter might've been better (not that it wasn't good already) if you'd included Hisao's reasoning for not being mad at Misha.
by freddy753
Tue Feb 23, 2016 12:21 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Benefit of Hindsight (updated 4/16!)
Replies: 175
Views: 34776

Re: The Benefit of Hindsight (updated 2/22!)

Jaysus... That's certainly something... This is one of those times where I'm both utterly surprised and unsurprised. This story is taking an interesting turn and I'm certainly up for the ride. Exactly this. It caught me by surprise at first, but then I realized Shizune would be the type of person t...
by freddy753
Mon Feb 22, 2016 8:05 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Benefit of Hindsight (updated 4/16!)
Replies: 175
Views: 34776

Re: The Benefit of Hindsight (updated 2/22!)

Like Azumeow said, I definitely couldn't see that one coming. I've even read FluffAndCrunch's collection of after-KS stories and I still didn't see it coming. Well done. With this latest chapter, I feel like a lot of the questions I've had about this story have been answered. Edit : While I was typi...
by freddy753
Sun Feb 21, 2016 11:07 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Flutter - Level Twenty One: Footsies [25/3/17]
Replies: 258
Views: 52800

Re: Flutter - Level Two: Water Hazard [21/2/16]

Those are the same thing. :) [LINK]
Hm. The more you know.
by freddy753
Sun Feb 21, 2016 8:19 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Flutter - Level Twenty One: Footsies [25/3/17]
Replies: 258
Views: 52800

Re: Flutter - Level Two: Water Hazard [21/2/16]

Please forgive me, sempai
senpai*
by freddy753
Sun Feb 14, 2016 2:56 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Flutter - Level Twenty One: Footsies [25/3/17]
Replies: 258
Views: 52800

Re: Flutter - Level One: The Haunted Hall [13/2/18]

I'm cautiously optimistic about this. The only Rika route with likable characters I've ever read was abandoned before it could even hit its stride, so I'm hoping you'll either see this through to the end or kill it off before I can get my hopes up. Hoitash was right about most interpretations of Rik...
by freddy753
Sat Feb 06, 2016 2:24 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "Lost & Found" 16/5/16
Replies: 339
Views: 55652

Re: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "The New Boy" 6/2/16

I'm beginning to wonder if you and Brythain will ever run out of ideas.
by freddy753
Fri Jan 22, 2016 3:27 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Benefit of Hindsight (updated 4/16!)
Replies: 175
Views: 34776

Re: Act 2, Chapter 5 - Drinks (Before Dinner)

Puncyclopedia wrote:And yet, this. I can almost hear her voice in my head, criticizing me. Asking me why I’m not willing to see her if I’ve forgiven her. It’s a question that is perfectly logical to her, and yet would make no sense to 95% of the population.
Interesting choice of words when talking about Shizune.
by freddy753
Wed Dec 23, 2015 8:10 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Miki: Fragments (Complete)
Replies: 204
Views: 49709

Re: Miki: Fragments (Ch.34 Posted 23rd December 2015)

Gajzla wrote: It would be hard to picture Mrs Komaki - respondent in her jewels and fancy dress
I think you meant "resplendent." There's some other mistakes too, but this one was the most glaring to me for some reason.