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by Razoredge
Tue Aug 20, 2019 2:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019
Replies: 32
Views: 2823

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019

I don't let anyone told me what to do with my stories, don't worry :D

But I take reviews seriously to improve myself, that's what I wanted to say.
by Razoredge
Tue Aug 20, 2019 12:08 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019
Replies: 32
Views: 2823

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019

I can't believe I do such mistakes once again. Thanks for pointing this out. For what you said after, in fact, I have a plot written for every scene, and my plot is written until the end of act III for now. I don't want to justify what I have done, but, you see, I don't write a scene after someone t...
by Razoredge
Tue Aug 20, 2019 8:56 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Respice Adspice Prospice - A Misaki Kawana Pseudo Route [Updated 8/17/19]
Replies: 24
Views: 2209

Re: Respice Adspice Prospice - A Misaki Kawana Pseudo Route [Updated 8/17/19]

I approve what Feurox said. Being so far, this story is good, even with minor problems.
I really like to read it.
by Razoredge
Mon Aug 19, 2019 10:58 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019
Replies: 32
Views: 2823

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019

Submerged I wake up with a knot in my stomach. This is the first time for me, I never did such a thing. And I'm clearly not ready, I slept for only four hours. I don't expect anything today, I know it will be huge mess. I take my pills with a sip of water. A little part of me tells me that I have a...
by Razoredge
Mon Aug 12, 2019 7:51 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Lap's One shots & misc - New Entry 8-11-19
Replies: 16
Views: 666

Re: Lap's One shots & misc - New Entry 8-11-19

So far, I have to admit, I liked this story. But, I'm a bit agree with Mirage, I don't think that Akira, in my opinion, should act like that, but it's nice to see that others people have their own vision of a character.
by Razoredge
Mon Aug 05, 2019 7:53 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019
Replies: 32
Views: 2823

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - I-9 added 08-02-2019

I totally understand what are you talking about, but you'll see, this condition will be useful in later chapters, trust me. I have planned some things, and I know I have done things that can be considered "bad" on this first act. But I hope you'll find the next chapters better on this point, I'm wor...
by Razoredge
Sun Aug 04, 2019 3:18 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Ask!
Replies: 4940
Views: 733961

Re: Ask!

Because Lilly is blind since her birth, and she's used to do things alone.
by Razoredge
Fri Aug 02, 2019 1:46 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019
Replies: 32
Views: 2823

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - I-9 added 08-02-2019

Wandering Mom called me this morning. Firstly, I thought that something was wrong, then I remembered. Every week, she calls to bring me some news. And surprisingly, everything was fine, as usual. Sometimes, I'm worrying too much about insignificant things. Dad was fine, she was fine, everything was...
by Razoredge
Sat Jul 06, 2019 3:20 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019
Replies: 32
Views: 2823

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - I-8 added 06-30-2019

Thanks for the kind feedback. I'm glad you care about her, this is why I try to do with her.
But don't worry, I haven't planed to break her heart, I mean, not yet.
by Razoredge
Fri Jul 05, 2019 8:45 am
Forum: Fan Works
Topic: The Look of Mei
Replies: 1
Views: 152

Re: The Look of Mei

Pretty cute, I like it.
by Razoredge
Sun Jun 30, 2019 2:56 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019
Replies: 32
Views: 2823

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - I-8 added 06-30-2019

Whisper The last week was pretty dull, I did the same training every day. It doesn't bother me to do the same thing day after day, but sometimes, I feel the need to change something. That's just what I did yesterday, I've changed my training sessions. Today, I will swim a lot faster than usual. And...
by Razoredge
Fri May 03, 2019 1:05 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019
Replies: 32
Views: 2823

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - I-7 added 04-21-2019

Thanks for the advice buddy.

I know I must try to make longer sentences, and this is what I try to do. Nevertheless, sometimes, I feel like my long sentences are weird, but I work on that.

I'll make longer sentences for the next chapter. And thanks again for the advice.
by Razoredge
Tue Apr 30, 2019 10:06 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20190916 Yields Six Servings)
Replies: 1793
Views: 242284

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20190429 Pictures of Lilly)

I can't describe my feelings while reading this piece. In other words, that was really nice.

Bravo.
by Razoredge
Sun Apr 21, 2019 2:53 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019
Replies: 32
Views: 2823

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - I-7 added 04-21-2019

Checkmate The water is like a mirror. On the diving board, I look at my body's reflection. Curves are waving, it's pretty funny. But I'm here to swim. I take a huge breath, and I dive. It seems that water is pretty cold today, but it's okay. I start swimming. I'm nearly alone, I woke up earlier thi...
by Razoredge
Thu Apr 04, 2019 3:51 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019
Replies: 32
Views: 2823

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - I-6 added 04-03-2019

Thanks for your words. I try to do everything I can to improve my writings and deleting all the gaps, it's pretty hard, because English is not my mother tongue.