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by Razoredge
Tue Oct 15, 2019 5:47 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Riposte (Rika Story) (Completed)
Replies: 44
Views: 2237

Re: Riposte (Rika Story) (Completed)

That was a nice reading for me from the start to the end. You, sir, have a good writing, I really like it. Such as Notice, I didn't get the Miki thing too, but you have your own vision about that, and that's a thing I like too. Different visions are good, especially on VN characters. I wish I could ...
by Razoredge
Tue Oct 15, 2019 5:56 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-4 added 10-15-2019
Replies: 35
Views: 3149

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-4 added 10-15-2019

Class support Thankfully, we had only three tests last week. This week is different in every way because we have some work to do for the festival. Therefore, we will have half of our afternoons free, which is useful to work on our class projects. Our homeroom teacher tells us what we will do this y...
by Razoredge
Mon Oct 14, 2019 5:01 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Updated 10/13)
Replies: 1028
Views: 270957

Re: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Updated 10/13)

Once again, this is a nice update. Now, I'm intrigued, about what will happens in the future about the surgery and all the stuff like that, how the characters will manage to bear that kind of event, and so on. You, Euro, achieve to hook me up to your story, and I have to say, I wait with pleasure fo...
by Razoredge
Fri Oct 04, 2019 6:16 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route
Replies: 15
Views: 546

Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route

As ProfAllister said, I'm not found of the rewriting of the first scenes from the game. Maybe you did for a specific purpose, it's up to you, but I'm honest, the start is not my cup of tea. However, the other scenes, in my point of view, are good. I have noticed the same issues with the plot, but I'...
by Razoredge
Fri Oct 04, 2019 6:10 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191007 A reply to Iwanako)
Replies: 1801
Views: 247508

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20190916 Yields Six Servings)

It's a nice attempt, I have to say. However, I'm agree with Nuclear, I don't think that Hisao would write the first paragraph like that, but if it's your vision, it's totally fine, differents visions are good. The others paragraphs are good, that's a fact. It's a nice little thing, except for, in my...
by Razoredge
Fri Oct 04, 2019 6:02 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-4 added 10-15-2019
Replies: 35
Views: 3149

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-3 added 10-04-2019

Try not converted Spending time with my parents made me happy, and thanks to this, I can start the week in the right way. We have an entire week free before starting the festival's preparations. I really like to help my classmates during this preparatory process, as much as I can. Sometimes, when I...
by Razoredge
Wed Sep 25, 2019 7:31 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako Fancopter One-Shots/Misc. Stuff (Latest 9/24/19)
Replies: 52
Views: 6403

Re: Hanako Fancopter One-Shots/Misc. Stuff (Latest 9/24/19)

I really like this last piece, especially how you dealt with Misha. Great job, sincerely.
by Razoredge
Tue Sep 24, 2019 3:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-4 added 10-15-2019
Replies: 35
Views: 3149

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-2 added 09-24-2019

For this chapter, here's a little piece of art I got from Rtil, I have to say I really like this piece. Thank you, buddy, in the event that you're potentially reading something like this. https://i61.servimg.com/u/f61/17/47/20/86/tanaba10.png Warm reunion The last week was pretty boring. At least, I...
by Razoredge
Tue Aug 20, 2019 2:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-4 added 10-15-2019
Replies: 35
Views: 3149

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019

I don't let anyone told me what to do with my stories, don't worry :D

But I take reviews seriously to improve myself, that's what I wanted to say.
by Razoredge
Tue Aug 20, 2019 12:08 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-4 added 10-15-2019
Replies: 35
Views: 3149

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019

I can't believe I do such mistakes once again. Thanks for pointing this out. For what you said after, in fact, I have a plot written for every scene, and my plot is written until the end of act III for now. I don't want to justify what I have done, but, you see, I don't write a scene after someone t...
by Razoredge
Tue Aug 20, 2019 8:56 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Respice Adspice Prospice - A Misaki Kawana Pseudo Route [Updated 8/17/19]
Replies: 24
Views: 2395

Re: Respice Adspice Prospice - A Misaki Kawana Pseudo Route [Updated 8/17/19]

I approve what Feurox said. Being so far, this story is good, even with minor problems.
I really like to read it.
by Razoredge
Mon Aug 19, 2019 10:58 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-4 added 10-15-2019
Replies: 35
Views: 3149

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-1 added 08-19-2019

Submerged I wake up with a knot in my stomach. This is the first time for me, I never did such a thing. And I'm clearly not ready, I slept for only four hours. I don't expect anything today, I know it will be huge mess. I take my pills with a sip of water. A little part of me tells me that I have a...
by Razoredge
Mon Aug 12, 2019 7:51 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Lap's One shots & misc - New Entry 8-11-19
Replies: 16
Views: 771

Re: Lap's One shots & misc - New Entry 8-11-19

So far, I have to admit, I liked this story. But, I'm a bit agree with Mirage, I don't think that Akira, in my opinion, should act like that, but it's nice to see that others people have their own vision of a character.
by Razoredge
Mon Aug 05, 2019 7:53 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-4 added 10-15-2019
Replies: 35
Views: 3149

Re: Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - I-9 added 08-02-2019

I totally understand what are you talking about, but you'll see, this condition will be useful in later chapters, trust me. I have planned some things, and I know I have done things that can be considered "bad" on this first act. But I hope you'll find the next chapters better on this point, I'm wor...
by Razoredge
Sun Aug 04, 2019 3:18 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Ask!
Replies: 4940
Views: 741675

Re: Ask!

Because Lilly is blind since her birth, and she's used to do things alone.