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by Path
Sat Jan 12, 2019 2:36 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A One-Shot: Footsteps in the Dark(9S/ Secret Santa '18)
Replies: 27
Views: 5709

A One-Shot: Footsteps in The Dark (9S/ Secret Santa '18)

Sorry about this late entry, but I did it none the less and I hope the story makes up for being late by a few weeks. Probably not. But overall, I really liked how this turned out and hope others enjoy it. victim: Downix Shizune realizes that she forgot to get Misha a holiday present at the last minu...
by Path
Fri May 04, 2018 11:52 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Black Iris (A Rin Epilogue; Update 3/31/2019)
Replies: 35
Views: 8292

Re: Black Iris (A Rin Epilogue; Update 5/1/2018)

Finally had the chance to read the new chapter. It feels like a piece was missing and we just entered the aftermath of it. It made more sense for Rin being Rin but in an open environment instead of Yamaku or the art school. I like the interactions between the people she met along the way. Not much e...
by Path
Fri Mar 16, 2018 3:25 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Black Iris (A Rin Epilogue; Update 3/31/2019)
Replies: 35
Views: 8292

Re: Black Iris (A Rin Epilogue; Update 3/5/2018)

Had to reread this story since it's been a minute and wasn't sure where I left off, but it was a good call to get familiar with your Rin and her new life. It seems like Rin might have taken an interest in Yumi's boyfriend. Probably not in this boy is cute way, but rather this boy might know me kind ...
by Path
Fri Mar 09, 2018 1:49 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Mask Off: A Molly Route (Update 3/8)
Replies: 72
Views: 20362

Re: Mask Off: A Molly Route (Update 3/8)

Act 2, Scene 8: Alone by Your Side “So is this right?” Takashi hands over his homework. “Almost. You made a small mistake here. Since this element lost its electron, it will be a positive charge.” “So the element that got the extra electron would have a negative charge because it got an extra elect...
by Path
Tue Jan 23, 2018 1:07 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Mask Off: A Molly Route (Update 3/8)
Replies: 72
Views: 20362

Re: Mask Off: A Molly Route (Update 10/31)

Mostly they are not even real mistakes but rather sloppy copy-pasting... Last minutes edits and add-ons made it that. If I gave it a week or asked someone to look it over, it would be no problem, but I really wanted to dropped this on Halloween. You've been teasing about her past a lot but I think ...
by Path
Tue Jan 23, 2018 12:41 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: [Ria's Oneshot Hell] 12/24/18
Replies: 22
Views: 5455

Re: [Ria's Oneshot Hell] S8 Update 1/1(ish)/18

I like this story, despite me hating Lilly and using her as a prompt idea. But I do like the dynamic of her with Misha because of how they have history and where they drew their lines. To see them interact is cool because it's not really a weird pairing, just a head tilt one. It's interesting to see...
by Path
Tue Jan 23, 2018 12:34 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A One-Shot: Footsteps in the Dark(9S/ Secret Santa '18)
Replies: 27
Views: 5709

Re: A One-Shot: From Time (8S/ Secret Santa '17)

Your spelling and grammar weren't very good, and it did get in the way of the story sometimes. Not a complete deal-breaker, but worth trying to fix - I'm more than willing to go through and pick out the mistakes, if you want, though you could probably catch most of them with a thorough re-reading (...
by Path
Fri Dec 29, 2017 1:37 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A One-Shot: Footsteps in the Dark(9S/ Secret Santa '18)
Replies: 27
Views: 5709

A One-Shot: From Time (8S/ Secret Santa '17)

Victim: FrauPerchta Prompt: Hisao sits in the tea room with the window open, drinking tea with Lilly and Hanako. Describe his thoughts, feelings, the tea, sounds of the room, ect. Side note: I was really tempted to use a scene from the game to see if anyone would know and take the lazy way out. Also...
by Path
Tue Oct 31, 2017 3:10 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Mask Off: A Molly Route (Update 3/8)
Replies: 72
Views: 20362

Mask Off: A Molly Route (Update 10/31)

Act 2, Scene 7: Here with You Again “You seem to be doing better Hisao. Keep up the great work!” Emi approaches me as I’m sit at a bench. “I push myself harder today than normally. Good to see the effort is paying off,” I open my water bottle. “I was beginning to think you were going to slack off w...
by Path
Sun Oct 22, 2017 12:25 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Black Iris (A Rin Epilogue; Update 3/31/2019)
Replies: 35
Views: 8292

Re: Black Iris (Update 10/14)

Nice little short read, something I know about. :lol: Chishiki seems like a nice person so far. sounds like a man who wants to see his students become better artist, but so did nomiya. Time will tell if he is similar or different than the red tilted art teacher. Also wonder if Aoki is going to come ...
by Path
Wed Sep 27, 2017 11:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Black Iris (A Rin Epilogue; Update 3/31/2019)
Replies: 35
Views: 8292

Re: Black Iris

I enjoy this story so far. I don't know why, but Rin here somewhat reminds me of Daria from her show back in the day. Not an exact copy but some lines of dialogue remind me of that randomly. Can't wait for the next chap and hopefully meet more new chars. Rin's mom seems like a neat character. Like a...
by Path
Wed Sep 13, 2017 1:37 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Gravity: A Molly Pseudo- Pseudo Route. Updated as of 11/03/2019
Replies: 113
Views: 28832

Re: Gravity-Molly pseudo route [09/07/16]

So i finally got around to read your fic after ignoring it since when I posted mine. Main reason was I thought it would be the same fic and for the most part that is not the case besides a few things, just flipped with how Molly feels about her parents and her brother I think. Which is funny to see ...
by Path
Mon Aug 21, 2017 7:29 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Mask Off: A Molly Route (Update 3/8)
Replies: 72
Views: 20362

Re: Mask Off: A Molly Route (Update 8/7)

Nice to see an update Path! Lovely stuff as always. One thing I have noticed is that sometimes your use of full stops creates abrupt, fact like sentences. Thanks man, glad you like it. I started reading your fic recently and like it so far. But anyways, I think I use those full stops to just get wo...
by Path
Tue Aug 08, 2017 1:47 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Mask Off: A Molly Route (Update 3/8)
Replies: 72
Views: 20362

Mask Off: A Molly Route (Update 8/7)

New chapter, new name, same writer. Act 2 Scene 6: Centipede Hands down. Eyes shut. I need to take a break from this. “Come on Hicchan~! You can’t stop now!” Misha places down more paperwork in front of me. “We’ve been doing this for over an hour now. My hand is starting to cramp on me.” “We’re on t...
by Path
Mon May 01, 2017 12:13 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Mask Off: A Molly Route (Update 3/8)
Replies: 72
Views: 20362

Re: "Can you open your mind?" A Molly Route (Update 4/17)

Given that Molly leaves school after classes it would probably be better to visit Emi first and THEN go to the student council room to keep his promise... That's true she leaves school. But she could stay later to study or hang out with friends. Plus shes is kind of confused on what's happening tow...