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I think she'd drink the water just fine if she had a straw with her, which she evidently doesn't. Uncapping the bottle would also pose a challenge. And the way I imagined it she's either sitting on a chair where she's painting or standing up, so using a table for balance and leverage is out of the q...

I'll leave the "technical" (spelling/grammar/etc) comments to somebody whose head isn't stuffed up at the moment. But, I did want to say that I enjoyed the trip to Planet Rin. (Which would make a great name for a restaurant. Maybe located at the opposite end of the universe from Milliways...

Stickers I'm stuck. I'm staring at a canvas. They're not usually like this, canvases. I can see right through most of them. This one's completely opaque. Maybe there's something wrong with it? I see the sun shining behind the clouds and the leaves blowing in the breeze and the buildings in the dist...

I'll leave a longer margin between writing and posting next time. Decently written story, but adds nothing of value.

I'm sorry, did it confuse you?

Using a notepad-style text editor makes it hard to figure out what's text reflow and where the newlines run. And I might be slavishly imitating VN-conventions, where it's always obvious who's talking no matter how many disjointed pieces of dialogue are thrown at you.

There was some mediocre prose here, it's gone now.