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by Feurox
Fri Mar 15, 2019 9:03 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yet another one-shot thread
Replies: 82
Views: 4593

Re: Yet another one-shot thread

Beautifully done Scroff. And over-the-shoulder watch from Hisao’s lonely festival. You mentioned R.E.M. with this, but it actually really reminds me of Bittersweet Symphony by The Verve- just crowds of people coming, going, living in front of a stagnant Hisao. You could have ended it there, but I’m ...
by Feurox
Wed Mar 06, 2019 11:56 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: (WIP - Updated 3/25/2019) Pilgrimage - A Subversion of Fate [Divergent Story - Hisao w/o Heart Attack]
Replies: 27
Views: 763

Re: (WIP - Updated 3/5/2019) Pilgrimage - A Subversion of Fate [Divergent Story - Hisao w/o Heart Attack]

One thing I wanted to mention before even diving into the story: speaking of Leafy It’s Leaty. I know that’s likely just an auto-correct issue. But obviously when giving credit, which, you are, it’s best to make sure that the credit information is accurate so that others can find the source easily. ...
by Feurox
Mon Feb 25, 2019 6:23 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Avenues of Communication (updated 3-24-19)
Replies: 31
Views: 2337

Re: Avenues of Communication (updated 2-24-19)

I second Scroff’s comment, my toast and coffee went down lovely with this story. A brilliant treat for the morning! I really love this chapter, and it’s getting clear we’re approaching the finish line - I think Shizune has gotten back to her old self a lot now, and Misha is very much deserving of su...
by Feurox
Sun Feb 24, 2019 8:07 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yet another one-shot thread
Replies: 82
Views: 4593

Re: Yet another one-shot thread

I took my sweet time getting to your one-shots Scroff! I’m afraid I’ve only been able to catch up with this most recent one, though as I find time I’m sure that’ll change. With regards to “You Are Not Alone” though I can only say wow. That’s a beautiful tale. Your writing is very poetic and it has t...
by Feurox
Sat Feb 23, 2019 6:15 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Sound of Silence, a Shizune one-shot ('All I Have'/'Enjoy the Silence' tie-in)
Replies: 8
Views: 310

Re: The Sound of Silence, a Shizune one-shot

This is peculiar. In a good way of course. It's a bit of a sting, having Hisao cheat on Shizune like that . Entirely the point I'm sure and had you not captured the 'version' of Hisao from Shizune's route, the pragmatic, drifter Hisao that refuses to assert himself in his own life and attempt to in ...
by Feurox
Wed Feb 20, 2019 11:04 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Masterplan (Finished)
Replies: 12
Views: 577

Re: The Masterplan (Updated 02/20/19)

This is fun - not much more to say about it, because it’s certianly not an attempt to be deep or present Kenji as sympathetic. Though, his camera traps are no doubt creepy at best. Still, your writing with fluidity and it makes me laugh - might want to separate your responses and posts though, got a...
by Feurox
Wed Feb 20, 2019 7:34 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Avenues of Communication (updated 3-24-19)
Replies: 31
Views: 2337

Re: Avenues of Communication (updated 2-19-19)

Another Wonderful Update! Beautifully written as always and charming, good to see Shizune is back to herself, and the compromises in her personality have served to make her stronger - ready to move on! Brilliant as always Lap.
by Feurox
Fri Feb 15, 2019 7:53 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Lighting Electric Candles (Rin)
Replies: 6
Views: 308

Re: Lighting Electric Candles (Rin)

Well. Ouch. Okay but really this is very sweet. The sudden switch in tenses threw me at first, but it comes to make sense of course. It's a beautifully sad tale made special by Rin's rather confusing attempts to process her grief. I think that end part captures Rin quite well, however, and I'm not a...
by Feurox
Mon Feb 11, 2019 8:46 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20190318 Yamaku's Cheshire Cat)
Replies: 1755
Views: 215628

Re: Yamaku Book Club (20190204 We, The Council)

We, The Council I like this story a lot, most likely because of Misha's role. I always find it interesting to see Misha's role as an interpreter, and I find that Megumeru did a good job transforming Misha into more than just a scatter-brained voice for Shizune, who I found to be presented less favo...
by Feurox
Sun Jan 20, 2019 7:56 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Ekephrasis/ American Spirit 01/08/2019
Replies: 15
Views: 1492

Re: Ekephrasis/ American Spirit 01/08/2019

This one contains some mature themes, but after a discussion with some of the other writers on this forum [] I think a specific warning may be unnecessary. I have to agree, because even after rereading that almost-H-scene a few times, I have no idea what is supposed to have happened while she... bl...
by Feurox
Fri Jan 18, 2019 10:17 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Winter's Blossom (Updated 1/17/19)
Replies: 9
Views: 575

Re: Winter's Blossom (Updated 1/17/19)

A beautiful continuation. Hisao's awkwardness is done perfectly and it's hard not to smile beamingly whilst reading Ikuno's lines. Good job, looking forward to more.
by Feurox
Wed Jan 09, 2019 8:48 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Avenues of Communication (updated 3-24-19)
Replies: 31
Views: 2337

Re: Avenues of Communication (updated 1-7-19)

Caught up - once again. You post these pretty rapidly, which I am by no means complaining about. But thought I'd give a somewhat more thoughtful comment than merely stating how much I like this story, which I do. I'll admit; sometimes the past tense throws me. That's nothing to do with your writing,...
by Feurox
Tue Jan 08, 2019 10:21 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Ekephrasis/ American Spirit 01/08/2019
Replies: 15
Views: 1492

American Spirit

Another one-shot to tide things over whilst I work on Gravity. (Surprisingly, I haven't given up on that.) This one contains some mature themes, but after a discussion with some of the other writers on this forum namely Oddball, ProffAllister and CozyRavioli, I think a specific warning may be unnece...
by Feurox
Fri Jan 04, 2019 12:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Winter's Blossom (Updated 1/17/19)
Replies: 9
Views: 575

Re: Winter's Blossom (An S9 Submission)

Well, I am a little biased of course, but I really love this so far. The initial bantering with Hisao and Ikuno is realistic and healthy, it refrains from crossing the line into unbelievable or pre-planned which keeps it natural and its clear that effort has been taken to flesh out a background cann...
by Feurox
Sun Dec 30, 2018 3:58 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Avenues of Communication (updated 3-24-19)
Replies: 31
Views: 2337

Re: Avenues of Communication (updated 12-29-18)

Loving this story so far. Seems particularly well thought out, and the relationship of the three is natural, (though I won't say fun given then circumstances.) Shizune's characterisation is very good and I'm enjoying it profusely. Haven't got much in the way of constructive criticism, very well writ...