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A beautiful read Lap. You know I'm not a lover of the happy ending, but I still adore the optimistic ending of this story. Lilly and Emi grow throughout and it's truly heart-warming. I was lucky enough to read this way back when it was your prompt for the contest, (before I was judging them as well)...

A lovely read. I didn’t encounter anything problematic with spag etc, and it’s not my favourite area to linger on, so well done. For the story itself, I think it’s a fantastic idea and you implement it wonderfully. It’s a story that scratches at some really awful and terrifying concepts: I think eve...

Welcome to the forums, as Nuke said. Good to see new people joining. For a first story on the Renai, you've got a great story here. Short and self-contained, and generally optimistic, despite the sadness within it. I personally disagree with Nuke's, (and subsequently your own) assessment of the flas...

Heart-wrenching Chris, well done. Fate sure can be convoluted, the world sure can be an awful and sad and hopeless place. You touch on that, but you contrast it with Miki, with the faint hope that we have to carry on, with Saki's realisation that the dead don't want company. If you ever flesh out yo...

Observers PT2 I take one last look around my room. Everything has been put away neatly. My bed is made, my clothes are all folded and tucked into their respective drawers, and the piles of letters that I’ve accumulated are no longer scattered all over my room, but are hidden beneath a jumper in my ...

Observers PT1 …And if you need me, remember not to call. The facilities at Yamaku are open from very early until very late, because many people here have complicated schedules due to their conditions. It’d make sense for them to be open twenty-four hours a day, but it’s presumably quite difficult t...

Many thanks for the feedback Zere, and thank you to anyone still reading this. I hope you're enjoying the story. This next chapter was proofread by Scroff and Lap, thanks, as always.

Beautiful as always!

This was a wonderful story, if actually quite heartbreaking. I’ve been thinking about doing another Saki story myself, and this certainly captures the trapped poetic beauty i’m aiming for. Suzu’s final act of reading the letter, and then drawing subconsciously, I can see them with Suzu gently crying...

What a beautiful and spiritual story. Very poetic and wonderfully carthartic. I love the little ritual here, and can’t wait to see you inevitably do more with those little symbolic rituals in the future.

This short letter was written in response to this week's book club meeting. You can see the conversation here: Book Club. I'd place this letter in my 'Requiem for a Heart-Song' timeline. Spectral Letters Dear Iwanako, I’m sorry this letter has taken so long to reach you; the truth is that your lette...

It's a nice short piece. But I definitely prefer 'Hello' by BlackWaltzTheThird. Still, quite nice.

Competition over. Congratulations Brythain. Truly. This story was some seriously good fun and I thoroughly enjoyed it. It's quite light-hearted, and if I'm honest, I doubt the practicality of running-blades for roof-running - and I'm sceptical of Roof-running as a form of exercise anyway, but the he...

Okay. So, before anything else, welcome to the Renai. I know you've been working on this for a while from your comments on the discord. Still, I think it's a good idea to go over the usual warnings I post for anyone attempting a route. It's not something to be undertaken lightly. Pacing will always ...

I feel it prudent to acknowledge that Synthetic Bruh's ‘Miracles, Kilts and Lilys' was written in response to the Yamaku Academy discord server competition, and that as such, they were assigned one of three potential judges to give feedback for their piece. It so happens that I was requested by Synt...