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The only criticism I would offer is to delete the inline comment, or move it to the postscript. Other than that, I like the start.

Atta boy Hisao! Forced enthusiasm is still enthusiasm!

“Sincerity - if you can fake that, you've got it made.” - George Burns

That's actually good, I was going to redo it since no one seemed to like the way I dd it but that explanation might allow me to save a large majority of this instead of haveing to scrap the hole thing thanks :D on mobile now so I really can't put it in now but. Thin ill work that in later to salvag...

One random thought I had after reading the first part of the story and the discussion regarding the timeline: Hisao recovery proceeded slightly faster here than in the VN. While still not fast enough to avoid the trip to Yamaku, it was enough to keep his spirits from falling to the point of driving ...

I think so," Hisao says as he sits down, "but I don't think it's going to go over too well... ETA: Hmmm...thinking about it some more, I can see where that could be interpreted as "let's pretend the confession never happened" as opposed to "I finally have my head on straigh...

I'll leave the "technical" (spelling/grammar/etc) comments to somebody whose head isn't stuffed up at the moment.

But, I did want to say that I enjoyed the trip to Planet Rin. (Which would make a great name for a restaurant. Maybe located at the opposite end of the universe from Milliways.)

I'm also thinking another -- but far less likely -- bad end path would be if Lilly were to come back and try to restart a relationship with Hisao. Hanako, with her history with friends betraying her, might react ... negatively ... if Lilly were to return to Japan with romance on the brain. (Consider...

Could we be seeing the beginnings of a Emi/Hanako vs Lilly/(maybe)Shizune Battle Royale for the heart of Hisao? Stay tuned...

EDIT: On a more serious note, if Lilly does return to Japan, I hope it doesn't backfire on her. (Remember Hanako's bad end?)

Good chapter, as always. He laughs. "You could say that. Anyway, I talked to Setou a few times about it. Kamisaka studied in Scotland, so she thought I might have some insight into the culture over there, but I probably learned more from her than the other way around." Should that be Satou?

As much as I would like to know more about the mysterious Karen, I do like the fact how you're fleshing out Hisao for this particular pseudo-route. (Or could it be a pseudopod-route? )

Remember me fondly friends and avenge my death.

We'll put up a small statue next to the large one of Kenji.

I've also been following this; and have found little to complain about and a lot to enjoy.

Thinking about it, I would like to know why Kat and Miki would stoop so low as to basically stab Hisao in the Heart, especially given that Kat knows why Hisao is at Yamaku. If is almost as if they were not content with just breaking things off with him, but making sure that he literally dies from he...

Pacing issues aside, it is an interesting story. I've enjoyed it. (And hey, putting a "cat" in a story is always a plus... )

Who knows, maybe in an unexpected plot twist, we'll get an Emi x Hanako wedding, with Hisao as the best man....

Unless we're talking about the mystery girl being a actual tentacle monster , or her breaking an entering; I'm betting Nurse gave her a key as well.

Way to go Lilly. That was just mean of her.