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by Retrograde01
Mon Jan 13, 2020 7:52 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Updated/New Art 5/26)
Replies: 1092
Views: 338057

Re: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Updated 1/12)

Finally all caught up. I feel like Act 4 so far has done a good job of capturing that limbo state between graduating high school and doing anything else. Can't wait to see how it all falls apart!
by Retrograde01
Sat Oct 26, 2013 4:49 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Precipitation- A Molly Pseudo Route . Update 8/12/13
Replies: 51
Views: 10871

Re: A Molly route. Update 26/10/13

I fall into deaths cold embrace and spiral into the darkness, blissfully dreaming as my legs are flattened like pancakes. You describe things in jarring ways quite a bit, but this line takes the cake. There are too many contrasting adjectives through the whole sequence. This line is another example...
by Retrograde01
Tue Oct 22, 2013 11:48 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Precipitation- A Molly Pseudo Route . Update 8/12/13
Replies: 51
Views: 10871

Re: A Molly route.

-Hisao seems to have realized a crush on her pretty quickly. Slow it down friend, it's better to take things like that slow so they're believable. Well In my experiences, crushes can happen rather quickly. They can sometimes, but if this is the case, there should be more of a "Damn..." factor, if t...
by Retrograde01
Fri Oct 04, 2013 1:21 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
Replies: 101
Views: 24259

Re: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]

Thanks for the support, guys. Scene IV will be out in the near future. Nice chapter. You know I'll always take quality over quantity. Everyone always says this, but two months is still unacceptable. "Hold up! One more thing!" She runs back into the bathroom and I hear the small spritz of a perfume b...
by Retrograde01
Thu Oct 03, 2013 1:33 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
Replies: 101
Views: 24259

Re: Redshift - Rika Route [7/27]

I royally fricken goofed, guys. I told you that the next chapter would be out soon a month ago, and I'm still not fully done with Scene IV. The was intended to be a part of IV, but I decided that I needed to put SOMETHING out to remind you guys that I'm not dead. This can be considered a trailer, o...
by Retrograde01
Tue Aug 27, 2013 1:38 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
Replies: 101
Views: 24259

Re: Redshift - Rika Route [7/27]

We'll find out more about why next chapter. :wink: S-someday, right...? Anyway I really enjoyed this :mrgreen: Bumping because I've seen quite a few fanfic authors on several forums quit when there wasn't much replies or encouragement. Oh my, I've hit the one month mark. I promised earlier that I w...
by Retrograde01
Sun Jul 28, 2013 5:59 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
Replies: 101
Views: 24259

Re: Redshift - Rika Route [7/27]

Hmm... no complaints about the chapter per se, but... Why does every Rika have to have such suicidal tendencies? And why do they have to drag Hisao down with them? ^^° Think of her as that one friend you had in high school that would always get you to do stupid and dangerous things. It isn't suicid...
by Retrograde01
Sat Jul 27, 2013 4:36 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
Replies: 101
Views: 24259

Re: Redshift - Rika Route [7/27]

ProfAllister wrote:
RedRover wrote:Pork!? The best flavor of instant ramen!? LIES! Chicken is the best! CHICKEN I SAY!!!

Otherwise, fantastic chapter.
Relax. No one believes something as absurd as that. It's another example of the author emphasising just how stupid Hisao is.
Right fools you are, the both of you!
by Retrograde01
Sat Jul 27, 2013 9:39 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
Replies: 101
Views: 24259

Re: Redshift - Rika Route [7/13]

--------------------------------------------------------- Scene III: A Slice of Life --------------------------------------------------------- "You're telling me that you've been here for three weeks, and you still haven't been to the town?" Alex asks. "No," I answer plainly. This is actually only t...
by Retrograde01
Thu Jul 18, 2013 8:24 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A preview to my gender bend story
Replies: 12
Views: 2097

Re: A preview to my gender bend story

Genderbending is an interesting topic, and I have yet to read any fanfics that have it.This particular snippet is too short to tell anything about the story, but you've piqued my interest. My one complaint however is the script format. While it looks easy and simpler to write, it's actually very dif...
by Retrograde01
Thu Jul 18, 2013 8:07 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
Replies: 101
Views: 24259

Re: Redshift - Rika Route [7/13]

UPDATE: I will not be releasing a new chapter tomorrow. One week isn't cutting it for this chapter, so I'll be raising the time between chapters to two weeks. Hopefully with twice the time, I can put out more well executed, higher quality chapters.
by Retrograde01
Sun Jul 14, 2013 11:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
Replies: 101
Views: 24259

Re: Redshift - Rika Route [7/13]

Another strong chapter. I can start seeing where some conflict can arise, but it's too early in the story for us (the audience) to see if that's what the major plot line is going to focus on. Keep 'em coming. The main conflict is coming, just you wait. You may or may not notice when it does arrive,...
by Retrograde01
Sat Jul 13, 2013 3:53 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
Replies: 101
Views: 24259

Re: Redshift - Rika Route [7/5]

I'm really enjoying reading this, and I really can't wait to see more. And don't worry, I'll try not to bug you about grammar. Maybe a little Please do bug me about my grammar; I'm always looking to improve. --------------------------------------------------------------- It's technically Saturday, ...
by Retrograde01
Sat Jul 06, 2013 1:35 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
Replies: 101
Views: 24259

Re: Flowing Red - Rika Route [7/5]

We've only known each other for three days, but somehow it just felt... right? We've only spent a total of two days together, and yet we were essentially cuddling last night. It feels... off. So... Which is it? :lol: Both. Like the others said, Hisao isn't really sure himself. I suspect the other o...
by Retrograde01
Fri Jul 05, 2013 3:10 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
Replies: 101
Views: 24259

Re: Flowing Red - Rika Route [6/23]

This was a difficult chapter for me to write, so I apologize for the delay. I really don't like the way it turned out, but I couldn't just scrap it. The next chapter will be much better, I promise. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Scene I - Horizo...