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by Markus Ramikin
Tue Apr 25, 2017 6:59 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Ten Drabbles in the Life of Akira Satou
Replies: 18
Views: 7115

Re: Ten Drabbles in the Life of Akira Satou

Short but excellent.
by Markus Ramikin
Mon Sep 22, 2014 11:57 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 264462

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Neutral End) - Ch.50 posted 9/1

Oscar Wildecat wrote:If you want a un-serious prediction about the next chapter... Hanako, in pleading to Hisao not to reject her, backs him up against the safety fence, and........
...and Kenji goes Batman and saves Hisao in mid-air?
by Markus Ramikin
Sun Sep 21, 2014 1:05 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 264462

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Neutral End) - Ch.50 posted 9/1

I congratulate you. You're clearly relying on the typical dramatic structure where there has to be a lowest point before success. The Hisao x Hanako outcome will now have to come as a surprising, powerful development, overcoming improbable odds, rather than an obvious and boring continuation, and th...
by Markus Ramikin
Fri Sep 05, 2014 3:24 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 264462

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Neutral End) - Ch.49 posted 9/4

Well, this is all entertaining and rather well written - I've enjoyed the earlier parts more, but still paying attention. Still, I hope you have an actual resolution in mind, and not going to go for an endless soap opera.
by Markus Ramikin
Mon Sep 01, 2014 12:39 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1549
Views: 264462

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Neutral End) - Ch.48 posted 8/1

Guest Poster wrote:The fact that Emi had a rather rough start (loli-like appearance at first and a rather underwhelming Act 1 ending) probably didn't help.
Nah, I just don't like pirates.

(Ninja, on the other hand, rule. Someone write a story where Hanako is a ninja.)
by Markus Ramikin
Mon Aug 18, 2014 6:47 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 81279

Re: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)

Any attempt at conversation will no doubt be doomed to failure, to stuttering and awkward silences worse than the one we'd be trying to fill. But the silence now is just as bad So would it be worse, or just as bad? Can't have both. For a marginally less frivolous observation: there are moments wher...
by Markus Ramikin
Sat Jun 21, 2014 1:06 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 81279

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 10/05/2014)

Just to make sure I was clear, when I suggested more awkwardness I was thinking in terms of communication, uncertainty about whether they were on the same wavelength, correctly reading each others' signals, whether Hanako really wanted Hisao to go straight to undressing himself there etc. (Which led...
by Markus Ramikin
Fri Jun 20, 2014 4:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 81279

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 10/05/2014)

Not a terrible chapter, but I just don't agree with the interpretation. To be sure, I like it in principle that you've been showing Hanako as a sexual creature. I really do; I remember reading some past fragments and thinking yeah, this is good, this is a Hanako we aren't directly shown in the VN, o...
by Markus Ramikin
Fri Apr 04, 2014 12:29 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 81279

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 03/04/2014)

Good update! I agree with Atario (what a surprise), in that this feels appropriate - and it's interesting to see her thoughts (and, ahem, feelings and desires) fleshed out beyond what she makes blatantly obvious to Hisao. That's kind of the point of writing from her POV.
by Markus Ramikin
Fri Mar 28, 2014 11:09 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 12/3/18)
Replies: 548
Views: 183695

Re: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (New Chapter 1/18)

If he's more into physics than chemistry, he might be more into the exceptionless rules thing. Seeing as it's an actual hard science. *ducks for cover*
by Markus Ramikin
Fri Mar 21, 2014 6:03 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Two Hallways - Hanako's Perspective (Updated 1/7)
Replies: 43
Views: 9026

Re: Two Hallways - Hanako's Perspective (Updated 1/7)

*grin* Or, you know, do it (or not) for whatever reasons happen to appeal to you specifically. Even if it's fan response.
by Markus Ramikin
Sat Mar 15, 2014 3:39 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 81279

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/03/2014)

Honestly, it makes total sense to me that Hanako in particular would be pretty absorbed in her own mental states and processes. She alone amongst the cast has psychological therapy sessions, and she is the most self-critical and voluntarily withdrawn unto herself. I agree! I just think 1. that aspe...
by Markus Ramikin
Wed Mar 05, 2014 5:55 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako's Story (COMPLETED 18/08/2014)
Replies: 378
Views: 81279

Re: Hanako's Story (UPDATED 04/03/2014)

One thing that kind of bothers me about the way this is entire story written is that so much space is devoted to Hanako's psychological problems being discussed explicitely. All this talk about "mah progress" is kinda self centered and circular, and it just gets old. A character's internal problems ...
by Markus Ramikin
Sun Feb 16, 2014 4:17 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Bad Hanako (Pt5, 20/2)
Replies: 46
Views: 7573

Re: Bad Hanako (Pt4, 10/2)

Well, yeah, it's OOC, but I admit I liked it when Hanako just dropped that note to the fl... oh, Shizune dies? This story is really looking up!

Good End incoming, right? ;)
by Markus Ramikin
Mon Aug 05, 2013 1:16 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hyacinth [18+] (Lilly Neutral End) UPDATE 4/22
Replies: 82
Views: 14668

Re: Hyacinth [18+] (Lilly Neutral End) UPDATE 4/22

Vekter wrote:all good things must come to an end.
Image why this