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by CptSalsa
Thu May 30, 2013 1:07 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hisao and Kenji: Masterful One Shots! Summer Update!
Replies: 197
Views: 44672

Re: Hisao and Kenji: Masterful One Shots! Anniversary Updat

Your supreme being of choice help me, the poor bastard really did need me.
Broke the fourth wall.
by CptSalsa
Fri May 24, 2013 11:45 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako and Hisao –Road to Tokyo Conclusion Update!
Replies: 268
Views: 54966

Re: Hanako and Hisao –Road to Tokyo Updated 5/22

Hi. "Do let me know if your insomnia comes back, though, or if anything happens at the concert.” Either the "though" should be gone, or you remove the comma before the aforementioned word. I think. “are you out of your motherfuckin’ mind!” Before I say anything, can I ask if this is supposed to be a...
by CptSalsa
Sat May 11, 2013 9:42 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hisao and Kenji: Masterful One Shots! Summer Update!
Replies: 197
Views: 44672

Re: Hisao and Kenji: Masterful One Shots!

Comedy gold. I want my life's morals to be based off of this writing. “Because,” I said, my lower lip beginning to quiver, “if Hana seeees me like this, she’s gonna get mad,” my quivering intensified as I began to whimper, “and when she gets mad she yells and she’s really scary when she yells and it...
by CptSalsa
Thu May 02, 2013 11:11 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hanako and Hisao –Road to Tokyo Conclusion Update!
Replies: 268
Views: 54966

Re: Hanako and Hisao –Road to Tokyo (A H&K:MD Prequel Series

Don't shoot me. (your cue to put down the gun you've pointed at me since March break) Now that that's out of the way, I was a bit disappointed that you weren't going to do that thing with the action movies but this is already looking to be a good read. Annnnd. I heard a familiar click emanate from t...
by CptSalsa
Mon Apr 15, 2013 1:28 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
Replies: 351
Views: 107065

Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 4/12]

Foot in mouth award for Hisao Nakai.
by CptSalsa
Mon Apr 15, 2013 12:50 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Everybody's Hands (Misha x Miki)
Replies: 8
Views: 3916

Re: Everybody's Hands (Misha x Miki)

Damn. I thought that the secret was that she could attach things to her stump. I mean, the way your narrative was going I assumed... And I'm siding with Waltz here. It might work for the Japanese with some words, but the English language has more than enough words to describe anything. Yep my argume...
by CptSalsa
Sat Apr 13, 2013 1:11 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Story with a Cat
Replies: 4
Views: 3297

Re: A Story with a Cat

Damn.

Oh and those triple dots look out of place in the second to last line.
by CptSalsa
Sun Apr 07, 2013 11:42 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (completed)
Replies: 907
Views: 416226

Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (completed)

To kimori, the reason is that choosing to face Kenji by herself meant that she had courage, the courage to both make friends with the person who kidnapped her and the same courage to face her future. The reason the choice does that because in the original VN, a choice built your morals and personali...
by CptSalsa
Sun Mar 24, 2013 11:02 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Ai
Replies: 10
Views: 2616

Re: Ai

What the... wow. Hmm. Acktphckdhaxxkfninjasgbg.
I did not expect, that. Okay.

So, that was interesting, you had me guessing, and you had me guessing wrong. Was that your intent, or am I really that dense?
by CptSalsa
Fri Mar 22, 2013 1:33 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Risky Business (Shizune and Hisao play Risk)
Replies: 5
Views: 2815

Re: Risky Business (Shizune and Hisao play Risk)

Pretty good for a first post. (I wish I had a story at my disposal when I first joined) or even be able to think of one at all You have pretty good grammar and spelling, nothing stood out except: [Hisao, it's your turn! Why do you have such a strained look on your face? You look like your constipate...
by CptSalsa
Tue Mar 19, 2013 8:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hisao and Kenji- Master Detectives! Conclusion? Update
Replies: 317
Views: 95473

Re: Hisao and Kenji- Master Detectives! Conclusion? Update

Thought I couldn't draw could you? I'll have you know that I graduated self-teaching. Yeah, my teacher had low standards. I am a traditionalist. Tablets? What are those? Are they some kind of drug? Dive Team HK.jpg This actually isn't all of it, there's actually way more that I'm not showing. This i...
by CptSalsa
Tue Mar 19, 2013 8:03 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: BlackWaltz's One-stop Oneshot Shop (New: 30th Apr 2014)
Replies: 144
Views: 59119

Re: BlackWaltz's One-stop Oneshot Shop (New: 18th March)

That that one! The previous part of the latest story; it's a sequel. Hanako told Lilly that Emi would be joining them.
ACK ACK ACK ACK... ACK.
AAH I BLAME MY PHONE FOR NOT SHOWING THAT HYPERLINK.
by CptSalsa
Tue Mar 19, 2013 9:58 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: BlackWaltz's One-stop Oneshot Shop (New: 30th Apr 2014)
Replies: 144
Views: 59119

Re: BlackWaltz's One-stop Oneshot Shop (New: 18th March)

I'd suggest you read the previous one  again. I don't understand. I feel like there's an inside joke here and I'm not privy to it. Also not a big fan of analyzing works when they continually scream rape in my face. Although if it had a different ending I would have accepted that. EDIT: Yep not seei...
by CptSalsa
Tue Mar 19, 2013 2:07 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: BlackWaltz's One-stop Oneshot Shop (New: 30th Apr 2014)
Replies: 144
Views: 59119

Re: BlackWaltz's One-stop Oneshot Shop (New: 18th March)

muttering ‘ass’ under my breath Called it. Nice story, your Emi seemed in character, although your Hanako is in her late stages, since she is open to much more hostile environments. Can I have clarification when this story took place, because it seems to have happened after Hisao settled in Yamaku....
by CptSalsa
Mon Mar 18, 2013 1:19 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Saki-Pseudo Route Continuation (Updated 4/3)
Replies: 67
Views: 25325

Re: A Saki-Pseudo Route Continuation (Updated 3/18)

How did... Interesting segue you put. Like before, I enjoyed it, but not as much as I could have, since I didn't quite understand what happened. Grammar ninja! or shinobi Sleep embraces out his arms to embrace me Weird wording. But then again this was probably Hisao's lethargy talking. Or thinking. ...