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by Acik
Sun Aug 31, 2014 6:54 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)
Replies: 72
Views: 16120

Re: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)

I just read this whole thing straight through so far and I have to say it's a good fun story, especially now that you're lead seems to be somewhat less of a jerk than he started off as. I do hope this continues. Sometimes it's nice to hit it all at once, isn't it? With my paranoia of plot holes I p...
by Acik
Sun Jul 27, 2014 12:14 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)
Replies: 72
Views: 16120

Re: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)

Sorry about the delayed response to the more recent messages, but as always I appreciate any and all feedback from you guys. Thanks for the fixes bhtooefr, sometimes things fall through the cracks. Don't feel too bad Mirage, we both missed them :lol: Bwahahahaha! This, I like this. Agreed. The bante...
by Acik
Tue Jul 15, 2014 7:27 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)
Replies: 72
Views: 16120

Re: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)

“So, what's her name?” Eguchi asks. “You work at the school. What makes you think I will tell you her name?” I scoff at her. Her grin widens. “So there is a girl?” I roll my eyes. “Don't feel too proud. You didn't catch me in some bugs bunny talking trap, I simply don't care.” “Then tell me her name...
by Acik
Tue Jul 15, 2014 7:26 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)
Replies: 72
Views: 16120

Re: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)

Chapter Ten: The Calm Never shop hungry. That's what they say, right? Glancing down at my basket full of candy and not so healthy snacks I think I might understand the danger. Then again, whoever came up with that probably didn't have to suffer Yamaku's lunch menu. Any reprieve from that is worth a...
by Acik
Tue Jul 15, 2014 7:26 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Look Back (Chapter One Complete, 7/15)
Replies: 7
Views: 2467

Re: Look Back (Chapter One Complete, 7/15)

One of these days I will clean up the formatting on this chapter and recombine it. Any further chapters on this project should be more akin to what I have done in Waiting . _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________...
by Acik
Sun Apr 20, 2014 11:32 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)
Replies: 72
Views: 16120

Re: Waiting (Chapter Nine, 3/7)

I love this story. Looking forward to the continuation As always, appreciate the support. Just wanted to check in since it has been a little while. To anyone who is following this story I assure you am I still working on it. The semester is winding down for me and Waiting is coming back to the fore...
by Acik
Sun Mar 16, 2014 10:49 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Look Back (Chapter One Complete, 7/15)
Replies: 7
Views: 2467

Re: Look Back (Chapter One, Part Two 3/16)

Well, I have been sitting on this next section of Look Back for quite some time now and thought, "Why not?" So I did what polishing I could do on my own, and here we are. Now back to work on Waiting . Allons-y __________________________________________________________________________________________...
by Acik
Fri Mar 07, 2014 5:53 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)
Replies: 72
Views: 16120

Re: Waiting (Chapter Nine, 3/7)

Chapter Nine: Side Effects I have a date… I think. But it's Kiyomi. She wouldn't ask me out like that. It just doesn't make any sense. She only asked me to take her because I'm her only friend here. Right? I sigh and plop my head onto my desk. I can't remotely focus on my homework. I thought I had ...
by Acik
Sun Feb 23, 2014 7:29 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Look Back (Chapter One Complete, 7/15)
Replies: 7
Views: 2467

Re: Look Back (Chapter One, Part One 9/17)

It's well written, but I really don't see what this has to do with Katawa Shoujo so far. Ha, nearly forgot that I wrote this. I started this as a little side project to help get the juices flowing while writing Waiting . At the time it seemed everyone was writing some sort of zombie fic, and while ...
by Acik
Sun Feb 23, 2014 3:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20191111 Two Old & Colourful Pieces)
Replies: 1806
Views: 250316

Re: Yamaku Book Club

Huh, interesting. This could be fun. I'm pretty sure I read Katawa Kijo, but rereading never hurt anyone.

Looking forward to this.
by Acik
Sat Feb 15, 2014 7:56 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kenji Who? Part 3 - Feb 20, 2014
Replies: 14
Views: 2511

Re: Kenji Who?

Kenji, wrapped up with a Time Lord. Or maybe he is one?! The glasses are his version of the fog watch, perhaps? Anyway, didn't spot any glaring problems with grammar. Interesting perspective from The Doctor. It's unlike any of the more recent or past incarnations, so maybe a future one? Things are w...
by Acik
Mon Feb 10, 2014 5:22 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)
Replies: 72
Views: 16120

Re: Waiting (Chapter Eight, 2/9)

"...my eyes are finally met by her eyes" would be grammatically correct, but passive voice is still very strange here. "Her eyes meet mine" or something similar would sound more natural. Fixed. Hopefully it flows a bit better. Fixed the other errors you pointed out as well. Thanks for the keen eyes...
by Acik
Mon Feb 10, 2014 12:49 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Dear Hanako - OC x Hanako - Updated 05/10/14
Replies: 34
Views: 9169

Re: Dear Hanako - OC Route (First time FF)

Ok, let's dive in here. Let me start by saying I'm not going to be hitting any editing points in this post. Not to say there aren't any grammatical problems or anything like that, but that's not what I focused on. In fact, I almost left this post after reading you based the main character after your...
by Acik
Sun Feb 09, 2014 9:21 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Waiting (Chapter Ten, 7/15)
Replies: 72
Views: 16120

Re: Waiting (Chapter Eight, 2/9)

Chapter Eight: Boarding Party “See, this isn't so bad, is it?” I wipe the sweat from my forehead and try to block out Jun's voice. Not so bad? Nah, not at all. Unless you dislike working in the hot sun on short notice. Then, yeah, might be a bit bad. “We'll be done in no time at this rate.” “Be fas...
by Acik
Tue Feb 04, 2014 6:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 04/30/16 ~ recommitted to completion.
Replies: 850
Views: 206467

Re: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 01/28/14 ~ C.43 - Mental Block

So am I, honestly. One of the things that I did that continues to make writing this hold my interest is that my outline is exceedingly vague. Sometimes an entire chapter has been based on one or two sentences. As I write this reply, I sort of don't even know exactly how the final scenes will play o...