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by MrDan
Fri Nov 30, 2012 7:44 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Catching Dreams (updated 11/30, seeking advice)
Replies: 34
Views: 5523

Re: Catching Dreams (updated 11/30, seeking advice)

Here is another short update, from Reika's point of view this time! The next actual chapter is still being worked on and I want to make sure it goes well, so I decided to add this in the meantime. I think readers know the drill, please read, criticize and enjoy! I would like to also ask for advice, ...
by MrDan
Mon Nov 19, 2012 1:19 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Just another one-shot compilation thread (new story 11/18)
Replies: 86
Views: 13030

Re: Just another one-shot compilation thread (new story 11/1

I was a little confused as to what exactly was happening in "What You've Done", but I found it a good read nonetheless. Jigoro is always an interesting character to explore and I like how you portrayed him. "Men Of Snow" got me a little teary-eyed, and I always love a good Misha story. The only pote...
by MrDan
Wed Nov 14, 2012 3:49 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Helbereth's Short Shorts
Replies: 28
Views: 10529

Re: Helbereth's Short Shorts

Short shorts is right. I like the concept of pieces this short, just big enough to relay a thought or squeeze in a story, but small and compressed enough to be meaningful throughout every sentence, every word even. It also appeals to my love for bite sized things that take little of my time. I've sp...
by MrDan
Sun Nov 11, 2012 5:37 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Catching Dreams (updated 11/30, seeking advice)
Replies: 34
Views: 5523

Re: Catching Dreams (updated 11/7)

The repetition and not mentioning Tanabata was tomorrow was just a little laziness from me unfortunately, and the dialogue being split up between texting and talking was something I juggled around a bit, writing text message conversations is weird for me. I'll definitely touch this up a bit later wh...
by MrDan
Fri Nov 09, 2012 11:15 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: YourFavAnon's Various Fictions [Update 3/16]
Replies: 146
Views: 38897

Re: YourFavAnon's Various Fictions [Update 11/9]

Pretty quality writing for 15 minutes of work, and that last line is gonna stay in my head for longer than I would like. Keep up the good work!
by MrDan
Wed Nov 07, 2012 4:42 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Catching Dreams (updated 11/30, seeking advice)
Replies: 34
Views: 5523

Re: Catching Dreams (updated 11/7)

I've been just a little sick, so my apologies for a new update taking forever, and this one is smaller than the usuals, which hopefully doesn't mess with the flow of it or anything too much. I wanted to really tackle the festival in this chapter but I wasn't up to it, so instead I wrote a little som...
by MrDan
Sat Oct 27, 2012 3:46 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: YourFavAnon's Various Fictions [Update 3/16]
Replies: 146
Views: 38897

Re: YourFavAnon's Various Fictions [Halloween Special 10/26]

YourFavAnon wrote:This was just meant to be awkward, funny and sexy all in one.
Mission accomplished, good sir. You managed to write something decently sexy that also made me legitimately guffaw, and that's an impressive feat.
by MrDan
Fri Oct 26, 2012 1:59 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: DaGarver's Miki Pseudo-Route (updated 12/25)
Replies: 27
Views: 10766

Re: DaGarver's Miki Pseudo-Route (updated 10/25)

I was a bit worried that the dream scene was somewhat out of place at first. Some of my Steam friends disagreed, though, so it stayed in after going through a couple revisions. Well, isn't it supposed to be a little out of place? Not in a bad way, but in a way that demonstrates that it's a dream sc...
by MrDan
Thu Oct 25, 2012 4:21 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: DaGarver's Miki Pseudo-Route (updated 12/25)
Replies: 27
Views: 10766

Re: DaGarver's Miki Pseudo-Route (updated 10/25)

I liked the dream scene, and the dialogue was really enjoyable, especially at the end. If I was a more thoughtful person I might be able to find areas for improvement, but really, this is pretty solid so far. Looking forward to more.
by MrDan
Wed Oct 24, 2012 4:48 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Catching Dreams (updated 11/30, seeking advice)
Replies: 34
Views: 5523

Re: Catching Dreams (updated 10/24)

An update! This chapter got on my nerves for some reason, just how I wrote it I guess, something felt off. I was hoping to show more of the character's, well, characteristics, but more fleshing out will come in time I guess. Hopefully this gears me up for a good next chapter, as you'll probably be a...
by MrDan
Tue Oct 23, 2012 9:58 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: DaGarver's Miki Pseudo-Route (updated 12/25)
Replies: 27
Views: 10766

Re: DaGarver's Miki Pseudo-Route

I'm enjoying this so far. The dialogue between Hisao and Miki was well done and felt right, and I like how you're doing Miki. Keep up the good work!
by MrDan
Tue Oct 23, 2012 9:51 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: -
Replies: 32
Views: 4127

Re: Girl Interpreted [Featuring... Girl!] [Updated 10/22]

This has made Girl a very interesting character, and it doesn't matter too much whether the chapter is short or long, as long as you're satisfied that it's quality work. Keep it up Doomish, I'm looking forward to more! That is one hell of a justification! Bravo. ...I still want there to be more art ...
by MrDan
Thu Oct 18, 2012 2:22 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Catching Dreams (updated 11/30, seeking advice)
Replies: 34
Views: 5523

Re: Catching Dreams (updated 10/14)

Thanks for the comments guys! And Scissorlips, in baseball, different postures and stances work for different people, my idea was that she was suggesting more than correcting, trying to help him find what works. And with her use of profanity, I knew in my head that he wouldn't be perturbed by it's u...
by MrDan
Sun Oct 14, 2012 5:52 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Catching Dreams (updated 11/30, seeking advice)
Replies: 34
Views: 5523

Re: Catching Dreams (updated 10/12)

Another update, this one was much easier to write, and my hope with this one is that I didn't get too technical that I scare readers. Other than that I'm relatively satisfied with the direction of the story, so read, criticize and enjoy! Chapter 6: Hot Start When Reika told me that she was living he...
by MrDan
Fri Oct 12, 2012 6:53 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Catching Dreams (updated 11/30, seeking advice)
Replies: 34
Views: 5523

Re: Catching Dreams (updated 10/12)

A new update! This chapter was one I was looking forward to, but for some reason during the whole writing process it left a bad taste in my mouth, and I had trouble getting it written. I feel my dialogue needs work, and I need to remember that just because something isn't relevant to the advancement...