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by Sapphire
Sun Sep 15, 2013 7:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
Replies: 58
Views: 15960

Re: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]

This is my first post, And I just want to say, I don't normally speak much, But when I get the honor to read something as nice as this. I feel I at least need to say something, Soo thank you so very much. It's so nice to see how close the KS Comunity is here. :D Please keep up the good work, if thi...
by Sapphire
Wed Aug 28, 2013 4:17 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
Replies: 58
Views: 15960

Re: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]

“I kind of...ran into a lot of people in my first little while here. Or sometimes they ran into me.” Hisao seems to be recounting something, but it goes over both mine and Lilly’s head. “Oh, before you forget, Hisao, perhaps you should Hanako what you told me,” says Lilly. 1. Lilly and Hanako were ...
by Sapphire
Wed Aug 28, 2013 11:17 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
Replies: 58
Views: 15960

Re: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]

~Behind my Scars, Chapter 6: Denouement. I had a nightmare; I awoke in a cold sweat, alone in my room. There are few feelings like it...The loneliness that comes with being alone when all you want is company is crippling. But I’m too nerve-wracked to even consider being upset. In my dream, Hisao fou...
by Sapphire
Wed Aug 28, 2013 7:55 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
Replies: 58
Views: 15960

Re: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 5]

This FanFic is written in such a frantic way that everything feels very disjointed. You're writing very short scenes with minor or major leaps ahead in the timeline that I don't feel like I follow an actual storyline but rather short flashes of it every here and there. -Snippy snippy- I think the p...
by Sapphire
Tue Aug 27, 2013 5:53 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
Replies: 58
Views: 15960

Re: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 5]

Well Hisao, everyone knows you get one punch, and only one punch, to knock someone out with one hit. You have used yours. In all seriousness, I like this fic so far. I also agree with Mirage though. The last of this chapter had Hisao acting out of character. While he does lash out in the VN a bit, ...
by Sapphire
Mon Aug 26, 2013 11:46 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Yamaku Library - The fan fiction archive -23/09/14
Replies: 496
Views: 148805

Re: The great fan fiction archive

Its good to see that you've updated your story, however, I think I will update the word count only when your story is completed. All right, that's fair. Glad to have an entry in there all the same, and glad that this thread even exists! :D Should be a sticky, IMO. Like a table of contents, or an in...
by Sapphire
Mon Aug 26, 2013 11:44 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
Replies: 58
Views: 15960

Re: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 5]

Hmm... First of all I can't imagine a scene like that happening anywhere in Japan. But even if it did, Hisao's reaction is way out of character for him. I wouldn't really say it's so farfetched. Hisao presented with many outbursts in the VN, such as the bad ending for Act 1, and his mad dash during...
by Sapphire
Mon Aug 26, 2013 10:05 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Yamaku Library - The fan fiction archive -23/09/14
Replies: 496
Views: 148805

Re: The great fan fiction archive

I'm not sure how things go with updating the list, but you can change the word count on Behind my Scars to ca. 9000. Because A NEW CHAPTER IS UP!~ :D
by Sapphire
Mon Aug 26, 2013 10:04 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
Replies: 58
Views: 15960

Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 5]

~Behind my Scars, Chapter 5: What am I doing? It’s been two days since Hisao’s accident. We’ve since returned from Hokkaido, and class is back in session at Yamaku. I debated going to school today. My body screamed a negative response at me. Between the trauma of seeing Hisao nearly have a heart att...
by Sapphire
Mon Aug 26, 2013 7:33 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Yamaku Library - The fan fiction archive -23/09/14
Replies: 496
Views: 148805

Re: The great fan fiction archive

Behind my ScarsEpilogue by Sapphire (In progress, ca. 7,000 words)
PoV: Hanako; Pairings: Hanako x Hisao; Begins: Immediately after Hanako's good end. [I.e., the kiss scene]
Remarks: Sex

There ya' go. I'm writing the next chapter as you read this.
by Sapphire
Mon Aug 26, 2013 6:57 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Yamaku Library - The fan fiction archive -23/09/14
Replies: 496
Views: 148805

Re: The great fan fiction archive

After a long hiatus, I was summoned as if by fate by a sudden private message asking me to finish my abandoned story.

So, I won't make any promises. I'll let my work show for itself. If "Behind my Scars" shows up in the active threads again, it'd be wonderful to have it added.
by Sapphire
Thu Sep 06, 2012 5:52 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
Replies: 58
Views: 15960

Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 4]

I apologize for anyone who's been wondering what's happened to this story, or believed that it went dead - because it didn't! I've lost consistant internet access, and I've run into some personal issues that I won't bore everyone with, so I won't be able to update for some time. When I DO get back o...
by Sapphire
Mon Aug 20, 2012 10:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
Replies: 58
Views: 15960

Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 4]

KS itself is adult content, and I've never seen anyone punished for not designating their fanfiction as the same thing. Besides, you had your warning in the story itself, just like I've done before, and that serves the same purpose. Duly noted. Will remove off the front. >_> This is something I don...
by Sapphire
Sun Aug 19, 2012 9:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
Replies: 58
Views: 15960

Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 4]

... Rather than one of the parties involved "making the point in his/her head", I got the impression it was just a fleeting thought. If you experience something for the second time, a comparison with the first time (especially if the first time was kind of an epic fail for several reasons) is hardl...
by Sapphire
Sun Aug 19, 2012 4:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Staggering Harmony - (A2,S15 Updated 12/30/15)
Replies: 86
Views: 24116

Re: Staggering Harmony - (Updated - Act 1, Scene 1)

You definitely ran into some trouble early on, grammar wise. I'll focus on that before we get to the story itself. First, decide your tense. I glance over to my side, looking over at the driver seat. My sister looked more cheerful than I did Glance is present tense. You use 'over' twice, and it isn'...