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- Sat Aug 18, 2012 11:13 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 4]
Time for some... hmm, what do you guys call it? Critique? Constructive criticisms? Regardless, I call it bitching. ♥ -Snipped for epic largeness- Still, pretty cool. I very much appreciate the critique.~ I've gotten used to having thick skin, being a writer and all. I'm pretty sure anyone who gets ...
- Sat Aug 18, 2012 10:32 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 4]
Was that a mini-heart attack like in Lilly's route or was he just out of breath? Cause I recall that event in Lilly's route was due to Hisao having forgotten to take his medication twice in a row. That's the idea. I'm continuing Hanako's route to the game, and my logic is that Lilly would still pro...
- Sat Aug 18, 2012 12:55 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 4]
~Behind my scars, Ch. 4: I’m your girlfriend! Contains mature content I can’t control my smile in the morning when I wake up with his smiling face staring right back at me through closed eyes. The feeling of his arms wrapped around me coupled with the warmth of his body is enough to paint my cheeks ...
- Fri Aug 17, 2012 3:17 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 3]
Another great post and quick update. Man i wish there were more people like you. Considering that we have found each other on here; I would have to see what you've been writing on here. And it does not disappoint as always. Your way of writing really does pull me in and makes me want to read more. ...
- Thu Aug 16, 2012 5:06 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 3]
No, no, no, no! Mirage is correct and it is the literate way of writing it. Here is the rule: drop the other noun(s) and find what pronoun you need. You wouldn't write "says Lilly to I" would you? Of course not; it's "says Lilly to me". Therefore, 'me' is the correct pronoun to ...
- Thu Aug 16, 2012 9:10 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 3]
My eyes remain fixed on the plane as it comes in for landing, then shift to look past the glass doors of the entrance to scan the faces for my blind friend. “Lilly!” I shout, louder than I expected myself to. Seems they made it through immigration and baggage claim in record time. Mm. In my head it...
- Wed Aug 15, 2012 11:28 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 3]
I love this story. Very well told. And just so you know this: ...Is it possible to contract a fever from severe blushing? Is going to be used by me in conversation from now on. Thank you very much.~ ^^ Feel free to use it as much as you'd like. If you want to give credit, I'm not above having my wo...
- Wed Aug 15, 2012 8:00 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 3]
~Behind my scars, Ch. 3: From Scotland to Hokkaido “Is that one it?” I ask. “Nah. The company colours are all wrong.” says Hisao. I frown. Lilly’s been away for a week, and now that Hisao and I are at the airport, it feels like time is standing still. The last three planes weren’t carrying the preci...
- Wed Aug 15, 2012 7:53 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 2]
another good-writing story of Hanako story :) keep it up. I can't wait for next chapter Thanks for the praise, and I'm glad you're liking it thus far.~ I've just woken up, and put Hanako in my signature! so I'll get to work on the next chapter in the next few hours or so. I have dogs that need walk...
- Tue Aug 14, 2012 9:56 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 2]
Thank you.~ I'll try to have Ch. 3 done for tomorrow.Tormound wrote:Another interesting and good read. Keep it up.
- Tue Aug 14, 2012 6:10 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 2]
~Behind my scars, ch.2: It’s called a relationship. I was having a pleasant dream. But now I’m awake, and my eyes remain shut as I try to get back to that dream. In my dream, I was relaxing in bed with Hisao, and his arms were...Wait. That wasn’t my dream. He is here. And he is holding me. That drea...
- Tue Aug 14, 2012 4:54 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 1]
This is good stuff so far. Short, sweet. I like it. Question: It's implied that the opening part of the chapter takes place right at the end of Hanako's finale CG. Isn't that their actual first kiss? Your opening sentence says otherwise, but I think the canon is that it's the first one. First, than...
- Tue Aug 14, 2012 2:58 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 1]
Here's hoping that first person from Hanako's perspective isn't overdone: I don't believe so. There's several Hanako epilogues out there, but from what I could tell, most are from Hisao's perspective. +1 to me for creativity? :D Here's hoping that first person from Hanako's perspective isn't overdo...
- Mon Aug 13, 2012 10:48 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 1]
Keep going please All of the ongoing hanako epilogues are on some kind of hiatus, mine included since I'm such a lazy fuck , and I need my fix So I'm not the only one whose affection for Hanako is a drug, eh? That's comforting. In any case, I'll likely have the second chapter done either 5am tonigh...
- Mon Aug 13, 2012 9:59 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Behind my Scars [Updated to: Chapter 6]
- Replies: 58
- Views: 31918
Re: Behind my scars [Updated to: Chapter 1]
Thank you. I fully intend to continue.~ I'm glad your interest was piqued by this opening chapter.Tormound wrote:Interesting development.....Continue