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Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Sun May 09, 2010 7:18 am
by Esa94
Smoku wrote:The spoiler message simply blows mind.
I agree.

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Sun May 09, 2010 11:40 pm
by GG Crono
:shock:

^ what this guy said.

But, in any case. Hooray! Happy ending!

As always, I look forward to future shenanigans. Your shenanigans are always a delight to read.

...woohoo, shenanigans.

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Mon May 10, 2010 1:01 am
by kosherbacon
Fun fact: Sayuka says "Ara Ara" a lot. It just gets lost in translation.

Edit:

BrokenDollverse OC roll call! Asterisks mark reappearances.

Fourty-one original characters have had speaking roles in my OC fanfics so far, not including Extremist_Line's luke fisher and Sergei and Yuri from the in-universe movie. Also not including the in-universe VN since Sakuya and Yuu don't actually say anything. Also not counting the crippled chicks, Ran and Yuna, whom Shinnosuke railed. Also didn't include two private school kids who got beat up without saying anything.


Broken Dolls


Yamaku class of 2008:

Shinnosuke Yamada
Eri Koyama AKA Eriko Shimada
Luke Fisher (Guest star)

Tachibana Family:

Yumi
Junichi
Takuro
Yoshiko aka Nikki aka Nicole

Hometown Police Department:

Officer Akiba
Officer Sanjo
Assistant Police Inspector Fuko Mikuni

Private School Denizens:

Sayuka Shimada (Class of 2006?)
Shinnosuke's classmates x4
Kendo Match Announcer
Kyosuke
Kyosuke's friend

Medical Professionals:

Yoshiko's Surgeon
Doctor Takachi

Miscellaneous:


Shou Mukai
Kasami Honjou
Shou's Bartender
Mr. Yamada
Yamaku Guidance Counselor
NUHL Admissions Counselor
Emina Kinosaki
Department Store Sales Lady
Housing Department Volunteer

Broken Dolls Reanimation(Coming Soon)


Yamaku Class of 2005:

Haruka Soro

Yamaku Class of 2010:

Yuki Kato
Masashi Kataoka
Rokurou Namura
*Yoshiko Tachibana
Bathroom Girl

Yamaku Class of 2011:

*Emina Kinosaki
Aki
Hotaru
Yui

Adults and Others:

Mr. Hasegawa
Yuki's Mother
Yuki's Father
*Eri Koyama
Pharmacy Clerk
Neighborhood Kid

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Thu May 13, 2010 10:15 pm
by Goldilurks
Y'know, I realized that the Luke/Hanako pairing means that this canon actually works with the Shizune'/Lilly yuri fics (that seemed to pair Misha and Hisao, IIRC).

Which means that they could have a great big school reunion full 'o lesbians. (Nikki: "...but she's blind? How the hell do they make that work?")

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Thu May 13, 2010 11:57 pm
by kosherbacon
Goldilurks wrote: Which means that they could have a great big school reunion full 'o lesbians. (Nikki: "...but she's blind? How the hell do they make that work?")
Must...resist...urge...to...fanfic...this.

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Fri May 14, 2010 10:44 am
by Goldilurks
kosherbacon wrote:
Goldilurks wrote: Which means that they could have a great big school reunion full 'o lesbians. (Nikki: "...but she's blind? How the hell do they make that work?")
Must...resist...urge...to...fanfic...this.
Give in to the power of the Dark Side, Obi-Wan. I do not fear the yuri, as you do.

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Sat May 15, 2010 5:39 am
by kosherbacon
Goldilurks wrote:I do not fear the yuri, as you do.
Don't worry, I've got an absolute crapload of Yuri planned. :twisted:

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Thu May 20, 2010 11:55 am
by SnigendePind
KOSHERBACON!

WE WANT MORE! THE PUBLIC WANTS MORE! FEED US!

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Fri May 28, 2010 4:09 pm
by Leotrak
And I thought EL's fics had me rolling around clutching my stomach due to laughter-induced aches :lol:

You, mister Bacon sir, are a master of humor. The rest of your writing is formidable as well.

Please continue :twisted:

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Fri May 28, 2010 11:10 pm
by kosherbacon
Leotrak wrote:And I thought EL's fics had me rolling around clutching my stomach due to laughter-induced aches :lol:

You, mister Bacon sir, are a master of humor. The rest of your writing is formidable as well.

Please continue :twisted:
I'm glad you enjoyed this! Don't worry, there are additional stories to be had with these characters. In fact, I just did one that got me the following reactions:
Awkward....
wat.
Wat.
No... no, no, no, NO, NOOOOOOOOOOOO!
btw, word on the street is E_Line is cooking something big :wink:

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Fri May 28, 2010 11:38 pm
by Extremist_Line
Leotrak wrote:And I thought EL's fics had me rolling around clutching my stomach due to laughter-induced aches :lol:
Huh? How were my fics funny? I didn't really intend them to be. Could you cite some examples?
Er, not that I'm saying I don't want them to be funny. I just...didn't know I was good at making people laugh...

kosherbacon wrote:
btw, word on the street is E_Line is cooking something big :wink:
Oh hell yes.
Cyberspace, implants, and Hanacat, oh my!
Hope you guys don't mind a massive genre shift.

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Sat May 29, 2010 6:24 am
by Smoku
yup. those incoming fics are a good job

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Sat May 29, 2010 8:24 am
by Leotrak
Extremist_Line wrote:Huh? How were my fics funny? I didn't really intend them to be. Could you cite some examples?
Er, not that I'm saying I don't want them to be funny. I just...didn't know I was good at making people laugh...
*ponders* Well, I'm awfully giggle-prone when in a laughter-induced state of mind, so that -might- have something to do with it... I'd have to dig through your writings again to locate any quotes, and I'm too lazy right now for that, but there were a lot of little things that just tickled the humor centers in my brain (hang on... do those exist? ">_>)

Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Fri Jun 04, 2010 3:34 pm
by kosherbacon
Extremist_Line wrote:But, there you have it. Hanako's visit with the Fishers. Hmmmm, now what?
kosherbacon wrote:Easy. Nikki visits again, this time with her "roommate."
http://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=52&t ... 205#p39162

http://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=52&t ... 342#p39242

Sure is busy in the Fisher household. Must be that famous southern hospitality.

And now, a story by Extremist_Line. Nikki learned her English from watching a lot of television.
*************************************************************
One Shot: A Gay Old Time
Sometime in the summer, 2008

"I mean, she was pretty cool. Yeah, she's a lesbo, but......yeah, really.......Swear to God.....Yeah, she has a girlfriend....Well she is a couple years younger than-"

*KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK*

"Oh, hang on man, there's someone at the door."

I took off my headset and sat the controller down. It's not like us to get visitors very often...

I opened the door, but I wasn't expecting for who would be on the other side.

"Nikki!?"

"Heeeey!" She said as she wrapped me in a hug. "Surprise!"

I looked up and saw that her 'roommate' Eri was behind her.

"Hey Eri!" She came forward and gave me a hug as well.

"Hey Luke." She replied.

"So...what the hell are you guys doing here?"

Nikki shrugged.

"We were in the neighborhood and thought we'd pay you a visit."

"In the neighborhood?"

"Long story. Can we come in?"

"Uh, yeah, sure."

I stood out of the way and let the two girls come in. I then walked over to my controller and picked up the headset.

"Sorry Dil, we'll have to play some other time. You know that girl I was just talking to you about? Yeah, she just showed up....Yeah, I'm serious....I'll call you later, ok? Bye."

I reached down and turned off the console.

"Sorry about that, I was playing with my cousin. So...you guys need something? I wouldn't have expected you to come out here just to hang out?"

"Well...we are kinda here just to hang out. I just wanted to see what kinda place ya'll had."

"Woah, you're speaking pretty good English Nikki."

"Thanks. Eri's not quite as good though, so forgive her.
"

"Hey Luke? Who was that at the door?" I heard my mom call from the other room.

"Ah, I always wanted to meet your parents..."

She walked into the living room, and I had no choice but to follow her.

"Hey Mrs. Fisher!"

"Oh, hello. Uh...and you are?"

"Oh, my bad. Yoshiko Tachibana, I'm going to Yamaku, I'm a second year right now. You can just call me Nikki if you want. You can also say I'm Luke's surrogate sister."

"I see...and who's that?"

"Um...I am Eri Koyama."

"She went to Yamaku as well. She was in the same grade as me, but not the same class."

"Well, welcome. Is there anything you need?"

"Nah, we just wanted to visit."

A while later, we had dinner together. We had enough stuff to cook for all four of us. My dad was out working today.

"So, you said you're Luke's surrogate sister?"

"Yeah, after we met in the rehab gym, we started off pretty rocky, but soon we became good friends. I had a...not too pleasant experience on a date, Luke was willing to help me out."

"Mm hm. So how did you meet Eri?"

"It was just by coincidence that we met one day while looking through the library's movies. I had always gotten the movies she wanted before her. We met up one night and watched a movie together."

"So, are you two best friends?"

"Well, we are gay, an-"

But Nikki quickly slapped her hand over Eri's mouth.

"Hey, Eri, uh, that doesn't mean the same thing as it says in the dictionary. I'm sorry, she's just started learning English. Yeah, we're best friends."

"Oh, ok."

Woah, nice save there Nikki.
*****************************************************
A few hours later....

"You know, I'm surprised. Where's all the tractors? Where's your dog? Where's all the moonshine stills?"

"C'mon now Nikki, you didn't really expect all that to be true, did you?"

"Uh, kinda."

"Sorry, I guess all I have to show is that Confederate flag hanging on the wall over there." I pointed at the flag hanging on the wall in my room.

"So, Yoshiko, why couldn't I say we were gay back there?"

"Well, if I'm not mistaken, the South is real anti-gay, isn't it?"

"That is one stereotype that is true, I'm afraid."

"Well, that's unfortunate."

"Yeah. It's getting a bit late guys. If you want to share my bed, you can. I'll sleep on the couch."

"Thanks Luke!"

"Just no diddling around, got it?"

"Jeez, you sound like my mother..."

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Re: Broken Dolls (Original Characters) New Story, Finished (Pg3)

Posted: Fri Jun 04, 2010 4:08 pm
by Esa94
kosherbacon wrote: One Shot: A Gay Old Time
Needs more TVTropes link. And the story needs more gay.

Other than that, it's great :3