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Re: Hanako's Love and Hisao's Regret (Chapter 5 Added 2-28-2

Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2016 12:48 am
by Jake Zero
Hanako and me met with her in her room to relax and spend some time together while she got settled back in.
"Hanako and I" here.
I'm not sure of Lilies decision yet, but I am sure that is weighing heavily on her mind.
"Lilly's decision" since it is possessive. Plus, there's only one Lilly.
She hands up and the line goes silent.
I'm pretty sure you mean "hangs up" here.

Re: Hanako's Love and Hisao's Regret (Chapter 5 Added 2-28-2

Posted: Tue Feb 21, 2017 2:52 am
by Zerebos
This is very unique continuation of Hanako's good end, not something I've seen before. I really like it, it definitely seems like a real possibility in canon too!

Re: Hanako's Love and Hisao's Regret (Chapter 5 Added 2-28-2

Posted: Tue Feb 21, 2017 12:20 pm
by Jake Zero
Zerebos wrote:This is very unique continuation of Hanako's good end, not something I've seen before. I really like it, it definitely seems like a real possibility in canon too!
Someone has apparently not read Sisterhood.

Re: Hanako's Love and Hisao's Regret (Chapter 5 Added 2-28-2

Posted: Tue Feb 21, 2017 7:10 pm
by Zerebos
Jake Zero wrote:Someone has apparently not read Sisterhood.
I have but this one definitely has a different feel to it.