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Here's all of Doomish's old shit

Postby Doomish » Sun Feb 26, 2012 8:57 pm

Sorry I deleted it all, it was immature of me. There's also some stuff in there I didn't ever post I guess. Have fun with it if you don't already have the backed up version. I lost all my motivation to write and figured deleting all my stuff to keep people from reading unfinished stories was the best way to go about things and it wasn't, and I'm sorry. I'm not going to write any more KS works and I don't plan on finishing any of the stuff in the compilation but in case you want to go through my stuff, here you are. Sorry for making a ruckus.

Download it all here.

Ignore every post below this one. This used to be the Braving the Storm thread (which was not archived). I decided to do it this way instead of making a new one which would even further clutter the forums.
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Re: Lightning [Misha]

Postby misterprinny » Sun Feb 26, 2012 9:12 pm

Crushed the overly hyperactive, too happy persona of Misha floating around my head. Good job.
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Re: Lightning [Misha]

Postby Mahorfeus » Sun Feb 26, 2012 9:24 pm

Ouch, that's really harsh. But seeing as she was borderline suicidal in Shizune's path, it's very plausible.

Hopefully things lighten up a bit.
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Re: Lightning [Misha]

Postby Doomish » Mon Feb 27, 2012 2:01 am

Forget it.
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Re: Lightning [Misha]

Postby Mirage_GSM » Mon Feb 27, 2012 4:00 am

A present tense slipped in here:
Her drills lie splayed out on either side of them,

Also, the student council room is in the same building as the library, just one floor beneath it.
And something seems to be missing here:
...but she paid no mind to it, of sound enough that she seemed almost used to it.

Did Misha just turn into Hanako?
Hanako just left her as she was and stumbled over to the corner where Shizune sat, comfortably curled up on a beanbag chair catching up on her reading.

Okay, done with the nitpicks. Another great story, and it being about Misha didn't hurt at all ;-)
I always like stories that try to find out who Misha really is.
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Re: Lightning [Misha]

Postby Doomish » Mon Feb 27, 2012 4:44 am

Mirage_GSM wrote:Also, the student council room is in the same building as the library, just one floor beneath it.


The school also doesn't have three separate buildings. :wink:

Not that I'm trying to explain away my mistakes of course, it's just that sometimes things require a little twisting to make them work correctly. And, also the fact that I totally forgot that until halfway through the story played a part in it. The other mistakes are now fixed as well, not sure how the Misha-to-Hanako thing even happened.
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Re: Lightning [Misha]

Postby Mirage_GSM » Mon Feb 27, 2012 6:13 am

I don't know...
The only buildings that are mentioned in the VN are the main building, the auxiliary building (which are connected) and the two dorms (which are not) - I don't think you want to count the shed ;-)
I'm sure there are other buildings on campus, for example a gym or staff quarters.
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Re: Lightning [Misha]

Postby Otakumon » Mon Feb 27, 2012 7:58 pm

Doomish wrote:
Mirage_GSM wrote:Also, the student council room is in the same building as the library, just one floor beneath it.


The school also doesn't have three separate buildings. :wink:

Not that I'm trying to explain away my mistakes of course, it's just that sometimes things require a little twisting to make them work correctly. And, also the fact that I totally forgot that until halfway through the story played a part in it. The other mistakes are now fixed as well, not sure how the Misha-to-Hanako thing even happened.

Girl+library=Hanako, don't sweat it. Nice story, was a good read. :mrgreen:
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Re: Lightning [Misha]

Postby YOTC » Tue Feb 28, 2012 2:52 am

Doomish, you need to write happy endings more often. The emotional hole you put people in during the story just makes that ending so much better... and sadder at the same time. Poor misha.
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Re: Braving the Storm (was: Lightning) [Misha]

Postby Doomish » Mon Mar 05, 2012 5:45 pm

I've changed the title of this story and added a table of contents. I'm going to write this one on and off with Little Faith, as I've decided to extend it into my Misha story! So, with that, expect an extension of the story sometime soon. Perhaps Misha will muster up the courage to reveal her love for Shizune, perhaps not. We'll see.
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Re: Braving the Storm (was: Lightning) [Misha]

Postby Mahorfeus » Mon Mar 05, 2012 10:53 pm

Well, the new title certainly has a hopeful connotation. Can the same be said for Misha?

Much popcorn will be eaten.
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Re: Braving the Storm (was: Lightning) [Misha]

Postby Doomish » Tue Mar 06, 2012 12:40 am

Forget it.
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Re: Braving the Storm (was: Lightning) [Misha]

Postby Doomish » Tue Mar 06, 2012 7:35 pm

Forget it.
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Re: Braving the Storm (was: Lightning) [Misha]

Postby misterprinny » Tue Mar 06, 2012 8:17 pm

At least this chapter was slightly uplifting. Good work as always :lol:
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Re: Braving the Storm (was: Lightning) [Misha]

Postby YOTC » Tue Mar 06, 2012 9:07 pm

Your writing makes me feel bad. On both levels of I can't write that well and that It just generally makes me dislike certain characters.
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