El Jay wrote:You put just enough detail into this stuff, not too much and not too little. Enough wiggle room for artistic license, and enough meat to the writing to have it known how you'd like things to turn out.
Well, it's good to know that I should keep doing what I'm doing. If the comments on perspective and panel placement are useful I'll keep adding them. I was afraid that was intruding too much on the artist's territory.
Ozymil wrote:Love the new format, definitely makes things easier to peruse through; same could be said for your writing style, which is much more fluid and enables me to paint a better mental picture of what's happening.
Out of curiosity, do you feel my style has changed between Shizune's and Emi's chapters?
Now now, request time! I think we can all safely agree th-FUUUUUUUU YOU MUST DO HANAKO NEXT.
Rin was planned next, as I had the clearest idea of what her chapter contained. but I'm not starting on it for a few days more. I've procrastinated on other projects (and a job search) enough for KH as it is. Throw in work and I'm probably not even starting until Friday, tentative completion weekend after next. So Rin was next in line, but you have a few days to convince me otherwise.
RIN FANS VS. HANAKO FANS! ROUND 1 - FIGHT!
Also, for future reference, yes, PLEASE switch to English when using titles and formalities. KS is already weeaboo as it is, and having to read through "chan" and "san" every other line would be more Wapanese than I could handle.
I can get behind this. It will be my policy on the project from now on.
G3n0c1de wrote:As far as I can tell, these are what Emi's 'normal' prosthetics look like. They are at the least, shaped to look like normal legs, and Emi wears stockings to mask that they are artificial. Whenever she isn't running, she wears these. These would only show up when she first appears. When she comes to deliver her son's cell phone, she'd have switched to her legblades. I wonder what these would look like without her stockings and shoes on. I don't know how they work, so perhaps they were designed to work with shoes, or are they advanced enough so that she can wear them with shoes or be 'barefoot'? I'm not saying you did anything wrong, it's more of a visual reference for any artists, I guess. Anyway, Nice chapter for Emi. I can't wait to read the other ones.
Thank you very much for pointing that out!
Loki wrote:Hanako was the first that popped into my head too, followed by Lilly. They strike me as the two most 'motherly' (especially Lilly) so I wouldn't be surprised for them to have/be working on large families. Lilly for aformentioned motherly instincts, Hanako for them too, but also because (in my interpretation of her character) she'd want her children not to be alone in case anything happened to her and (assuming it is) Hisao, like with her families. I think being lonely after the accident would have been one of the worst things for her.
...that is a fantastic argument and a well made case for believable characterization. In her chapter I will write Hanako as going through her second trimester.