ZystraL wrote:Suggestion - put words in Speech Marks inside those little narrative boxes like they do in Comics. Easier to separate and crap.
It's what I had in mind. Sorry I didn't make it clearer.
El Jay wrote:Hah, well, Hisao... yeah, I'm not entirely happy either. I'll just wig his hair out something fierce. His sleep has been interupted for a while now, making him look beat might just do it. And HANDS, yeah, I'm just going to find a decent pair of hand motion used in sign and base it off that, forget it. Panel one's sign is more or less right though, it's for "Go to sleep", go figure. :K
You did research for this? You awesome person! I caught the hand symbols in the first panel and liked that little detail immensely.
Last but not least, I ACTUALLY practiced drawing an anime-ish style for a change between page 2 and this, so I'm a little happier with Shizune's apperance, and another reason she looks more herself might just be the fact that she's got the angry-eyes going. And drawing a night-gown is less akward now.
I notice the improvement. Not to sound like an incredible perv, but she still looks kinda flat. Other than that, spot-on.
EDIT UPDATE: Found a pic on the shimmie that looks like a great adult Rin.
Not a bad idea to use that for her chapter as reference. Not in those clothes, of course, but still.