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Haha, okay. Just wanted to make sure. The sentence makes a whole lot more sence now.

Yay, another chapter, sweet! Suzu is so damn adorable!

Right, now I have to let my perfectionist out..

so if she happens to fall asleep on you, it probably doesnt me[an] anything.

Also, 'because I know shit all of where I'm going.' Am I reading this wrong, or did you mess it up?

A second chapter already? Has this already been written, or are you an extremely fast writer?

Alright, now on to your grammer, you seem to have mixed up some homophones, for example,

The others shook there [their] heads

And theres a few full stops missing.

Also, making Hanako bacon? WAHAHAHA!

Oh, wow. Great as always, BlackRockHanako.

I'd write some more, but it's 5 in the morning here, and insomnia combined with the mental image of a Knife/Paintbrush in Rin's eye have left me slightly speechless.

Heh. Rin reminds me a little of Mordin from ME2 in this story. Its good, I dont know about the Marvel crossover yet, we'll just have to see how it ends up. Grammer wise, there needs to be full stops after the narration that comes after speaking parts. You seem to have missed quite a few. And thats a...

This seems like its going to end up as a great story, hope to see more soon.

This story.. Oh wow. I think Kenji sums it up for me.

Kenji wrote:That was badsss.

Great work as always, keep it up!

That was pretty awesome. I hope that its not just a one-shot and that you keep on writing this.

Sorry for the double post, I'm leaving in a few minutes, but my draft has been cleaned up nicely and I'm fine with what I've written, so I've decided to just go ahead and post it. Opening Act: Chapter 2 ___________________ I’m still confused on just what is going on. Everyone was called here with no...

Sweet, a new chapter! I really like this story, and a bad-ass Hisao is pretty awesome too. Lol'd pretty hard at Hisao going 'Ivegottagodosomething!'. Hope to see more!

It looks like the writing is alright, but I've had enough of these types of stories lately, I might come back this in the future though. Which part did you dislike? The horror/gore aspect? The crossover part? If you could be a little more specific, it would help me improve my writing. Ah well, not ...

I'm not quite sure how this is going to work with KS. Shizune is not the type to go on a rampage and kill of other students. Also, you might want to think of a reason why Shizune would invite exactly those people for whatever she planned - and I mean a reason other than "they are the main char...

Hello Katawa Shoujo Forums! This is my first time posting a story anywhere on the internet, so constructive criticism would be gladly appreciated! Just before you start reading, there are a few things that I should clear up. Firstly, the name would roughly translate into 'Disability Party', which is...

Triscuitable wrote: And why are we assuming Mutou is Ten? He could very well be Five or Seven.

Well, if you look at the first post, the credits part to be specific,

Mut-Who wrote: Starring:

David Tennant

Or, the Tenth Doctor.