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- Mon Apr 09, 2012 10:29 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 369807
Re: Rika Story - updated 4/5/2012
Still more to come before Act 3 is over. Act 4 is forthcoming. Thanks for reading. Erotic content warning in this one. *** Scene 11: Paths I reach over and clasp her hand, looking into her eyes. She gives me her complete attention. “Rika, you don’t need to be left alone, because you’re not going to ...
- Fri Apr 06, 2012 4:09 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 369807
Re: Rika Story - updated 4/5/2012
Didn't Rika just get through explaining about people wanting to change her and everything? Hisao says she doesn't need to change then says he's trying to change her? Then of course Hisao mentions Rika's dead ex boyfriend, and (rightfully) criticizes her for stressing Hisao knowing about his conditi...
- Thu Apr 05, 2012 6:00 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 369807
Re: Rika Story - updated 4/2/2012
Thanks for reading, everyone. I really appreciate the replies. Here's a little something new. Feedback and comments appreciated as always. Scene 9: The Answer I reach over to her and clasp her hand, looking into her eyes. She gives me her complete attention. “Rika,” I say to her, “getting better doe...
- Tue Apr 03, 2012 3:09 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 369807
Re: Rika Story - updated 4/2/2012
You know, SC is going to go down on CYOA stories real quick - forum rules and all that... Hmm, I didn't mean to do that, but I guess it was my own indiscretion in that last post. I wanted to have a "branch" showing two possible outcomes, sort of like the VN. Didn't intend to give the impr...
- Mon Apr 02, 2012 9:06 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 369807
Re: Rika Story - updated 4/2/2012
Just for clarity's sake, was Rika and Hisao on the same level heightwise on that scene when Rika's on the tree? When I first read it I thought Rika was a story or two below Hisao, so the whole imagery that came after got messed up. Thanks. I tried to reword it to clarify a little bit. She's at his ...
- Mon Apr 02, 2012 8:45 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 369807
Re: Rika Story - updated 3/29/2012
Interesting fact: I'm not an April fooler. Just an unreliable bastard who shouldn't set unrealistic deadlines. Sorry, everyone. [Edit] This part of the story ends with a branch and two possible outcomes. This is not intended as a CYOA. I will post both outcomes regardless of what anyone wants, and I...
- Thu Mar 29, 2012 10:35 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 369807
Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012
This entry is more set-up than pay-off, so more is definitely owed in decent time. I just didn't want to hold out. More to come this weekend. Scene 5: Wards The other students are pretty merciful about my shabby appearance in class. I woke up with an empty bed and an ominously open window, fully dre...
- Tue Mar 27, 2012 3:56 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 369807
Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012
Cool, why did I hear "Breathlessly" when I was reading the scene wth Rika. That's my fave song. The fact that I can evoke it in my writing is an honour. I want to thank you guys for the awesome feedback. It really means a lot to me. I'm sorry I haven't been updating this as often as I use...
- Sun Mar 25, 2012 4:00 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route
- Replies: 153
- Views: 112090
Re: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route
Ooh, starting to heat up. Maybe?
Loved the faux-pas with Miki right at the start. That was cute. I like that your Hisao is at least self-conscious about being a bumbling dweeb. It's endearing.
Can't wait for more.
Loved the faux-pas with Miki right at the start. That was cute. I like that your Hisao is at least self-conscious about being a bumbling dweeb. It's endearing.
Can't wait for more.
- Fri Mar 23, 2012 4:42 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 369807
Re: Rika Story - updated 3/20/2012
Any news on this? Well... okay. Since you asked nicely. Scene 3: Quality and Quantity “Hey! You came!” Emi waves enthusiastically at me as I step out from the stairwell onto the rooftop of Yamaku. She motions me over to where she’s sitting on a small bench with Rin as they eat their packed lunches....
- Thu Mar 22, 2012 2:15 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Once Upon a Wartime (Kenji/Yuuko, erotic content) [COMPLETE]
- Replies: 63
- Views: 26461
Re: Once Upon a Wartime (Kenji/Yuuko WIP) [Mild erotica]
Vekter - curse you and your avatar for making me picture the Yuuko Daki as she rolled around in her bed. Your scene was unintentionally erotic. That said, I love the abrupt transition between parts 1 and 2. Straight from delicate, pining Yuuko to insane, insane Kenji. Really builds a beautiful contr...
- Tue Mar 20, 2012 11:35 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 369807
Re: Rika Story - updated 3/20/2012
I dunno; to me it seemed unnecessarily harsh, and not at all the sort of letter a Japanese would write to another. How he feels isn't really relevant (though given Rika's revelations I'd expect him to be questioning his feelings double quick). What's relevant is the fact that his letter is rude , a...
- Tue Mar 20, 2012 11:15 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Silentcook - Janitor of the Century
- Replies: 14
- Views: 7365
Re: Cally's Cave of Wonders
I remember these! I've already told you that I love your writing. Especially "Winter Day" (which you told me is one of your least favourites, but whatever), your Shizune/Misha drabble (I love their chemistry!) and the relationship between the three generations in Sports Day. Again, loving ...
- Tue Mar 20, 2012 11:10 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: You And I Both (Shizune)
- Replies: 5
- Views: 4971
Re: You And I Both (Shizune)
I'm not sure what the guy who accused you of writing in script was getting at. This is pretty clearly a prose style. There are a lot of things I love about this story. First, I love Hisao's introspection. I love how he reflects on Shizune, on his surroundings, internalizes them, etc. It's my favouri...
- Tue Mar 20, 2012 10:50 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 369807
Re: Rika Story - updated 3/20/2012
Thanks for reading and replying, you guys. It means a lot. She gets along well with people with similar disabilities but everyone else she's "...just lonely and awkward". Except for Saki, right? They're friends in this route too? I don't really have any plans to use Saki in this story. Whe...