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Oh, okay thank you for the clarification, I was confused on that point as well, and out of curiosity, you are Gib-Gab-Goo on fanfiction.net? Because you have the same username (actually, ALMOST the same)here and that account has the same story, I'd figure yes, but I just want to confirm it. Back to...

You go to the trouble of making an original character. Then you go to the trouble of providing an intro for him. Then you make him go through nearly the same sequence of events as Hisao in KS, including among other things: -Him meeting a guide -Him asking about the library (and later, visiting it a...

Silentcook wrote:The more people essentially copy-paste KS's scenes into their own stuff, the harder I frown.

At least try not to be lazy, for chrissakes.

Criticism is perfectly fine, but could you at least try to tell me how I'm copy-pasting scenes from the VN into this story?

slinging my back over my shoulder I think you mean backpack. At least I hope you mean backpack, it'd be a pretty odd think to do, not to mention physically impossible. And I'm loving the story so far, it's great. Can't wait for more. I certainly did, thanks for pointing that out! Thanks for the app...

Hello again! Apologies for this chapter taking so long. My computer motherboard decided to kill itself 2 weeks ago, so I've had to sort out replacements and such for that. Though I ended up getting a new PC with a delicious I7 in it, silver-linings and all that. Also University. Hopefully this Chapt...

Well, there's the occasional capitalized word strewn in... Then there's homophones: I didn't get a good luck look at the town ...there were one o two more examples of that, but I can't find them again ^^° Also, Takanaka seems to be almost more jovial than nurse. A bit strange for someone his age......

Chapter 2: Teachers, Students, and fine literature - April 5th 2007 "Getting woken up by an alarm clock and not wanting to kill the thing? My, I'm changing already". If my memory serves me right (and it normally does), I'd had to purchase replacement-upon-replacement alarm clock in the pa...

As you encourage it ;-) You jump between past and present tense several times - once even in one sentence. "as the bus drove quieter and quieter into the distance" Should be "more and more quietly" to be grammatically correct. "I don't know if I'll be able to bare it, "...

Chapter 1: Brave New World - April 4th 2007 "So, this is it? This looks far too fancy to be a school for the crippled". Many thoughts and feelings raced throughout my mind as the bus drove more and more quietly into the distance, and I stood in slight awe of the regal looking gate in fron...

Also, yes, I'm planning on having Hisao in the story as a regular character at some point. You'll have to change the timeline then. KS takes place in 2007. Unless you're planning on him being one of the teachers; if so, carry on. Oh, of course. I'm an idiot. Thank you kindly for pointing this out a...

This story as it is, is shaping out to just be doing the same story as the game except switching out Hisao with an OC. The thing I suggest is to actually have Hisao in this story. Have it so this story is going on at the same time as one of the girl's paths. I think that would make the story much b...

...my brain appeared to head my order... I think you meant "heed" I'm not sure if the part where they decide to send him to Japan is meant to be funny... I'll assume it is. Also - and this is only a minor thing - the travel itinerary seems a bit... unusual. Firstly, threre are plenty of d...

Ahh I see. I'm not sure either, but logically it feels like he would transfer to a high school. Thank you for the clarification, I didn't realize he was in Britain :lol: Yeah, I think I unintentionally left it fairly ambiguous as to where this chapter actually takes place(Barring obscure place name...

Looks very interesting so far. One question. It seems like William is supposed to be going to college, but yet he's going to Yamaku which is a high school? Did he get held back a year? Thank you! Yes. My lack of knowledge about transition from the British education system to the Japanese education ...

This is, admittedly, my first attempt at a (hopefully) long-length story in quite a number of years. So I apologise for any writing rust that might rear its ugly head. Feedback/Criticism is greatly appreciated! ------------------------- Chapter 0: Prologue - January 18th 2006 "Hey...Wilhelm, ho...