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Dunno if this could be of any interest to you or anyone else frequenting this wretched hive of scum and villainy , but I hardly ever comment on works in progress beyond mentioning very basic or very big issues, since I feel I can't give good critique unless I'm looking at a finished product. You kn...

Okay, I really liked this chapter. Your OC is so different from all the others. Glad you like it! Er, her. Honestly that's just sort of how she comes across in my head... it's weird how if you imagine enough backstory and behavioral idiosyncrasies for a character beforehand, they almost write thems...

Wow, thanks everyone for the positive feedback! I'm really happy that y'all like it, considering the relatively high caliber of fanfiction that's associated with KS. Stay tuned! Your musical theme is possibly my favorite part of this. It's great, and reminded me that I really should start writing mo...

...so, how would one make the tires move while still being in place? Emergency brake? The car needs to be in gear and your foot needs to be off of the brake in order for the tires to move. Generally speaking, if the tires aren't very grippy, you can spin them by shifting into low gear and mashing t...

Hey all! I can't believe it's been two months since the last update... I'm so sorry. Good news is this: I've been doing work on the story on and off, but between starting a new job and helping my SO get ready to move cross-country, it's all been a little haphazard. Thankfully, now, I'm able to star...

Triscuitable wrote:Don't you mean sister?

I assumed she meant Shizune.

griffon8 wrote:But I won't be reading it anyway. There are limits to what I can take in a crossover, and this goes waaaaaaay beyond that point.

Agreed. My disbelief is far to heavy to be suspended. At this rate, it'd collapse the brooklyn bridge if hung from the bottom.

Wow, I am absolutely flattered! Sorry updates are coming so slow. I promise it's not deadfic! I'm getting a lot of legwork done so hopefully I can start on a weekly update schedule. Stay tuned!

Holy moly! That's a lot of story for one post. Not that I'm criticizing; I'm guilty of the same thing once upon a time. Lucky for you it's very good. Honestly there's not much criticism I can offer up. Your writing is solid, your characterizations are well done, even if your Miki does seem like an a...

And nope, no porn from me. It'd probably end up sounding silly. Good. I seriously doubt porn would end up working in a story like this anyhow (as I've said in previous PMs). ...Honestly it doesn't really work anywhere, at least for me. There's something inherently un-sexy about reading a descriptio...

SemisoftCheese wrote:If you look at the info screen you can see its an extra.

I retcon everything I said and will slink back to my corner now.

Note: The below is just friendly advice. Feel free to disregard with extreme prejudice. I really, really, really think you should get an editor. Really, really. Here's why: Your writing, on its own, is very strong. You're a good writer, really. Your imagery is fantastic, and you write good dialog. Y...

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Negativedarke wrote:
Nah. We all know Hanako's kink will be the worst of all. Consensual sex in the missionary posiston. That little Perv!

With the lights off. After lots of hugging and kissing. Trollop.

I bet she'd even have the gall to cuddle afterwards. Quite the brazen one, Hanako is.

Hey y'all. While work is being done on the next few chapters, I must admit that I've been revising how I want some parts of the story to play out. Some of the revisions conflict with information I'd included in past chapters, so I thought I'd say that Scene 7 has been updated, nothing too major, but...

Two things: A bored expression on her face, she turns and surveys the classroom. She locks eyes with me, and gives a slight tilt of her head towards Mutou, a bemused smirk on her face. I give her an apologetic smile, and she winks at me, a bemused smile on her face as she faces front again. I walk t...